| Title: Oops?
| 02 Apr 2009 10:47 pm
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| Reviewer: fictionfan (Anonymous)
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I really liked this story, but it seems to be drifting into MarySue territory. Harry's ability to hide the shame of the abuse suffered at Vernon's hand was cool, but Uber Harry who overpowers Snape and Dumbledore... not so good. IMHO
The humor element is a nice touch and Harry teaming up with Fred and George and their salute... nice
Author's Response: Don't give up on me yet! That was mostly just a panic response, not a good indicator of Harry's power when he's in control. Thanks for your review!!
Ooh - nice ending there. I'm looking forward to seeing how Severus plans to react in the future... and especially what Harry thinks of it! Somehow I have the feeling that there will yet more fireworks! :D I hope you update soon.
Author's Response: Fireworks are fun...:-)
Well, at least Severus finally realized that he really put his foot in things with the way he started off with Harry. He's right that it will take a herculean feat to earn that boys trust at this point. Maybe he could realize why he can't sleep in the Hospital wing and help? He is, after-all, a master spy who is supposed to notice things that others wouldn't. Surely he could see that the boy CAN'T sleep-instead of thinking he is refusing to. Add that to the fact that the "last time" he slept he was in a "protected" area and maybe he could come up with some solution.
Wonderful chapter. I love Poppy!
V.
Author's Response: That's an idea...I don't know yet :-) Thanks!! I like Poppy, too. I hadn't originally conceived of her as a major player in this but she seems to be turning into one.
Aww poor Harry..he must have been so scared to do that, im glad that he likes Poppy though..I felt a little bad for Severus at the end, im looking forward to seeing him try harder with Harry : )
Author's Response: Yeah that was definately a major panic moment. Albus should send out a memo: "I like my school. Please do not scare Harry." lol
Does the infirmary have a private room for a patient that needs to be quarantined? The castle could probably make one if needed. Of course that depends on whether or not Harry tells anyone about the room being too big.
Author's Response: Hmm...an idea. The problem is, as you said, Harry's pride. We'll see! (I don't know yet either lol)
I especially liked the ending to this chapter where Snape realized that his approach to Harry had not been the way to gain the boy's trust. It is encouraging that he vows to try harder.
Author's Response: I thought so. That's the other reason the chapter's a little shorter than the previous one - I wanted to end at an encouraging moment. :-) (Not that the next chapter will necessarily be discouraging)
Wow, great development! I can't help but wonder if Severus will ever grow the trust and rapport with Harry that Poppy has. I look forward to seeing him try. :) I'm glad that Harry is finally looked after, but he still needs his potions. Great chapter! thanks so much for sharing it with us!
Author's Response: LOL thanks for the reminder...
Aw, I'm so glad that Snape is finally realising that he is making Harry nervous.
I'm looking forward to seeing where you're going with this story.
Author's Response: Thanks!!
Poor harry, he has so many issues to deal with. And it doesn't help that he and Snape strike sparks off each other, does it? But then, since Vernon was probably the one who abused him, any adult male would be unlikely to gain Harry's trust for a long time. But at least Severus is willing to try and maybe Harry will start to see that.
Author's Response: We'll see, won't we? Thanks for the review! :-)
Hang in there, Sev, you can do. Just remember, an injured, scared child is the same as an injured scared animal. Treat it carefully, talk in low tones and count all of your fingers after you feed it.
Author's Response: lol I like that. :-)
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