Potions and Snitches
Snape and Harry Gen Fanfiction Archive

Title: Omission or Commission 17 Jun 2022 11:05 pm
Reviewer: cavehack (Signed) [Report This]
    Very helpful interlude chapter. I appreciated seeing Dumbledore’s response.
Title: Omission or Commission 11 Feb 2015 7:38 pm
Reviewer: Megan (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I'm enjoying your story. I particularly like that you have shown Harry with behavioural, emotional and social problems which are common to the abuse you have suggested.

    However, I have rated it 6 out of 10 because I feel there could be improvement in the writing, for example more realistic diaglogue (such as no ”duh” and using words uncommon to British people - nobody says "mind me" here). Additionally, I think writing style should convey tone rather than over reliance on capitalisation.

    Characterisation could also be stronger.
Title: Omission or Commission 03 Mar 2010 7:41 am
Reviewer: Jenifer (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Hi,
    I am greatly enjoying this fic and am delighted to find a nice long fic that promises to be such an entertaining read.
    BTW Harry's previous address was 4 Privit Drive, NOT 4 Private Drive. Privit is not a miss-spelling of Private, it is a genus of shrubs, one variety of which is often used as a hedge.
    Also, here: Surely it can't just be the principal of the thing – I know you've obeyed professors in the past.” Principal should be principle, they are not the same thing.

    Author's Response: Yey, glad you like! And thanks for the corrections! I'm a dumb butt. Will fix. Rhiannan
Title: Omission or Commission 10 Apr 2009 9:03 pm
Reviewer: wellyuthink (Signed) [Report This]
    Ooh! Cliffhanger! *excited*

    Definitely liked the conversation and the way Albus reacted. I can't wait to find out what Harry's done now - and what will happen next! Great writing, please keep goign!

    Author's Response: Oops I forgot to respond to this one. I'm glad you like cliffies - a lot of people don't. :-)
Title: Omission or Commission 10 Apr 2009 9:07 am
Reviewer: missny1 (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Great Chapter, make the Dursleys pay for what they did.

    Author's Response: Harry's needs come first, but I'm sure that will come...
Title: Omission or Commission 10 Apr 2009 2:47 am
Reviewer: qtuani7 (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Hellos Nannan! Peoples are mentioning the "floo" misspelling, sorry I entirely missed that one. Your spell-check wants "flue" because that is the little door thing in the top of a fireplace that you have to open before you start a fire (and close to keep the cold out). So anyways, well done, and I'm just starting to Beta the next chapter so I'll email it to ya by tomorrow. Much love, and well done chapter!, Me.

    Author's Response: Hey, brat. This is far too public a forum for you to call me that. Brat. Don't worry about the misspelling - I fixed it. Well done on the beta for the last one, though we didn't get to chat about it a lot. I'd appreciate it if you read over (quickly) those parts again, since I've changed quite a bit, before reading the rest. When are you getting your fanfic up here, anyway?
Title: Omission or Commission 08 Apr 2009 5:56 am
Reviewer: LinerRocks (Signed) [Report This]
    Eeeeek! Ah! Harry! Snape!
    Ahhhhhhhh! eeeeeeeeek!
    ahem.
    You write well. Please update soon.

    Author's Response: LOL. Thanks. Update will be up relatively soon - I'm like 2/3 soon and have an unexpected amount of free time right now. Thanks again, Rhiannan:-)
Title: Omission or Commission 07 Apr 2009 10:01 pm
Reviewer: Snapegirl (Signed) [Report This]
    Great chapter! I like how Severus told Albus the truth, because sometimes he can be blind, but he really does need to know what's been going on. And he is right, Sev is the best one to handle Harry at this stage, he ought to remember what he felt like growing up under Tobias and use that to better understand and help Harry.

    Author's Response: Thanks! Yeah I figured both Albus and Severus benefited from that. Albus needed a reality check, and Severus is just too self deprecating for his own good. :-)
Title: Omission or Commission 07 Apr 2009 7:17 pm
Reviewer: starangel2106 (Signed) [Report This]
    hello, I'm enjoying this story a lot. It is realistic in how the characters would act. However I have noticed that there are a few spellings errors. For example Flue is Floo. I'm not one to be able to spell either, but I would use a spell checker, or in the case of Floo reference it in the books or ask another fan. (I'm just letting you know, I hope you don't take this in a bad way and lose your muse, cause I want more of the story asap. :D)

    Author's Response: I do actually use a spell checker - which is part of the problem. I thought floo was spelled that way, my spell-checker actually disagreed. I think "floo" as in "floo powder" is either a British term that my American spell checker doesn't like, or a JKR make-up. I'll fix it. Thanks! And no worries, I'm in no danger of losing my muse. :-)
Title: Omission or Commission 07 Apr 2009 4:09 pm
Reviewer: wrappedinharry (Signed) [Report This]
    Excellent. A wonderful little insert that has added to the story in general. It is lovely to see this close relationship between Severus and Albus.

    Lesley~

    Author's Response: Thanks!!

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