Poor Harry is seriously confused and miserable. I’m looking forward to seeing him up to his antics in a happier way soon!
I LOVE how you portray Harry. Him being sharp and educated. A little adult, capable of handling and fighting other adults...until He's not and he's just a kid, no matter how hard he tries.
Harry is being a prat. Baby Baby Baby
Gosh I hate this kind of Harry. He really has no respect for his elders. I hope he gets better quickly then slow
Poor guy. Having some of the only control he in his life stripped away must be really hard. I think you portrayed his possible response to everything very well.
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| 03 Mar 2010 4:13 am
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| Reviewer: Alex (Anonymous)
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Well, Snape and Madame Pomphrey certainly are terrible at dealing with abused children. Shouldn't they know that what an abused child wants most of all is the control that they have never had. By physically assaulting him to force him to take a potion, they have destroyed any chance of exerting an influence over the situation. Better would be to talk to him find out more about why he doesn't want to take the potion, negotiate an agreement. I don't think they could have handled it worse than they did, by using their size advantage to force their will on him. After all, Isn't that essentially what Harry's uncle has always done. In a REALISTIC story, this incident would substantially decrease Harry's trust of BOTH Snape and Madame Pomphrey because they were both a party to it.
Author's Response: Perhaps it was a mistake on their part, but I would also point out that this is the way things go in hospitals all the time. Harry needed meds, and he needed them then. I'd also point out that they did try to talk.
| Title: The Executioner
| 23 Apr 2009 10:25 am
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| Reviewer: Secret (Anonymous)
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I really, honestly enjoy your story. However, one of the things that bothers me is Harry's relationship with Pomfrey. His concession towards her feels more like a half-hearted, hastily-drawn attempt to have Harry trust and like someone. I can understand your reasoning: she heals him of his wounds, doesn't resemble his Uncle as much as a male would, and she doesn't seem as short-tempered with his behavior as Snape has (and perhaps may slightly resemble his past favored teacher at most). Unfortunately, with Harry's distrust of adults, his reaction to her seemed overdone. I imagine that he must have some resentful (and perhaps fearful) memories of Petunia to contribute to his fear of adults. It's harder to imagine that he would feel shame and contrite when Pomfrey scolds him when he was just trying to protect himself, and not anger at their lack understanding that desire. And Harry viewed Pomfrey's call for Snape as a betrayal. For the "greater good" or not, even if he realized it wasn't an attempt to harm him, she betrayed him by having someone he distrusted restrain him. The final straw was when Pomfrey said "Neither is an excuse for throwing a temper tantrum like a spoiled toddler". Powerfully negative insults that couldn't possibly be construed as an attempt to pacify or rebuke Harry for his behavior. Them be fighting words. *shrugs* I do not know a single individual who wouldn't have bristled with offense. His reactions to her aren't a result of the situation; they feel more like a result of how the author wants Harry to change.
There's not motivation placed to sympathize why he trusts her. Why her? McGonagall has given him more reason for trust by indirect help of sheltering him from Snape (although I don't think that's enough either).
=] I'll continue reading your story. I enjoy it too much to forget it. Just thought I'd try my hand at reviewing.
Author's Response: Thank you for the detailed review. Hmmm...I dunno if I agree with you or not. Harry PARTICULARLY dislikes Snape, having pegged him for a bully from his first potions class, so comparing Harry's relationship to Pomfrey with Snape is not entirely useful. As you've pointed out, she is female, and Harry almost killed her and she didn't do anything. And Harry doesn't trust her as much as he might seem to - he LIKES her, cautiously, and doesn't want her mad, but that's not the same thing. You're right, though, that that could have been better portrayed.
Good chapter. I just wonder, how the Dursleys were able to harm Harry, when he is such a powerful wizard, even more powerful then Snape as it seems?
For my taste he is a bit to strong for his age.
But I still like your story and your writing-style, thank you very much.
Author's Response: Thanks! No worries - Harry's very strong, it's true, but accidental magic is not a good indicator for true power in "my" harry potter universe.
Awww this chapter was fine, It made me smile to see Harry trying to be all grown up talking logically and snobbish just like Severus can. The whole incident seemed to be a small step onto Harry starting to think that maybe Severus isnt going to hurt him like his family did, looking forward to more : )
Author's Response: Thanks!! That's what I was hoping for :-)
Loved the title of this one! Poor Snape, good thing he doesn't know that's how Harry thinks of him, LOL!
I liked how the two adults tried to reason with Harry first before making him drink the potion, so that he can see that not every adult is going to use force to make him obey. I'm glad they didn't use magic either, it might have caused Harry to go nuts. Poor thing, afraid of Snape stroking his throat. I wish somebody would go and run Vernon over with the Knight Bus! Several times!
I also like how Poppy disicplined him after, so he learns that there are consequences to his actions and that they are reasonable. Perhaps one day he'll learn that the same is true of Sev too.
Author's Response: Thanks! And no worries - Vernon will get his comeuppance. :-)
loving it! more please
Author's Response: Thanks! I like your username by the way. I love Snakes (both in HP and in real life) and own a ball python. :-)
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