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Title: Honesty 31 Jul 2009 11:15 am
Reviewer: Woodi (Anonymous) [Report This]
    That room was a brilliant idea. :) Have you study psychology? Sometimes I think that, because your characters and dialoques are so damn real ;) soory for language;)

    Author's Response: Thanks!! No, I haven't studied any psych, but I'm familiar with it. (At least to know that one wants a 'neutral' space for any sort of therapy and such, and some things about how kids respond to abuse.) Mostly I just know my characters. Thanks so much for the compliments, and you certainly don't have to guard your language with me. :0)
Title: Honesty 31 Jul 2009 5:36 am
Reviewer: Snapegirl (Signed) [Report This]
    Maybe that will be the thing that gets through to harry finally, spending time with Snape and seeing him as a person as well as a disciplinarian.

    It's kind of frustrating to see Sev always being rejected.

    And I'm wondering how it is that Harry doesn't hate his relatives for doing what they did to him. Why didn;t his magic act to protect him? Or maybe he just doean't want Snape to get in trouble if he goes after them?

    Personally, I love bashing Vernon, it's wickedly fun, because he's such a nasty evil man, can you tell I really hate chid abusers? And sadly. . . .so many of them walk free because they get off on technicalities.

    Author's Response: Yeah, hopefully now that Sev lets Harry just TALK, Harry'll be more open and more willing to listen, as well. We'll see. I understand your frustration, because I feel it, too, but speeding up the pace of their relationship just doesn't feel 'natural' enough to me right now. I'm doing what I can, but I, too, have to give Harry time. ____I don't know if Harry hates his relatives or not, honestly. I don't know if he knows, either. Most abused kids don't. ____ Don't worry. I'm sure Vernon bashing will eventually happen. It just might have to not be Snape. :-( And you're not going to hear me defending child abusers. I get seriously pissed when I hear of the number of times that the perps not only stay out of jail, but get their kids back.
Title: Honesty 28 Jul 2009 7:32 am
Reviewer: le skrewt (Anonymous) [Report This]
    "If you do talk to me, you say what you want to. If you want to spend an hour throwing insults and curses at me, so be it. Nothing you say will get you in trouble."

    Oh boy - this should be good! *rubs hands in glee*

    Author's Response: LOL I think so, too. I wonder what Harry will have to say...
Title: Honesty 27 Jul 2009 9:06 pm
Reviewer: dancingkatz (Signed) [Report This]
    Sinistra is definitely a harpy. And Sev is right, you can get polite or you can get the truth, and it's very seldom that hte two are compatible.

    I have liked every chapter of this fic and this one is no exception. As far as length, don't worry about it. chapters begin and end where they want to regardless of length.

    Is Sev going to take Harry to the Room of Requirement? Whether or not, I'm looking forward to the next chapter whenever your RL lets you get it done.

    Dancingkatz

    Author's Response: Hey!!! Thanks for your support. I feel the same way - sometimes a chapter is just over, and there's not much I can do about it. Glad you like the chapter!! :0)
Title: Honesty 27 Jul 2009 8:43 pm
Reviewer: studiohq (Signed) [Report This]
    This is really a fab story! I love following it.

    Author's Response: I'm glad you like it!! :0)
Title: Honesty 27 Jul 2009 6:52 pm
Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous) [Report This]
    It is sad that Harry is so well trained that he can't trust anyone. I have great hope for this latest scheme. Sev is very intelligent, he must figure out at some point that he needs to offer Harry some reason to trust him. Consistant behavior is great, but will take a very long time to build up trust.

    Author's Response: Yeah, I agree. I figured giving Harry some time to be with Sev, but relatively on his own terms, might help. We'll have to see. :-) Thanks for the review.
Title: Honesty 27 Jul 2009 6:28 am
Reviewer: ImUpToNoGood (Signed) [Report This]
    I love Severus' compromise. It really is an uphill battle for Severus to get through to Harry. I am still very much enjoying this.

    A few notes:

    Which Pasadena did you mean? If you mean Texas or California, it is spelled Pasadena, and I suspect Severus would not be using that as an example. I suspect he'd go for Greece or Spain or the French coastline. It just struck me as it's at the end of the chap.

    Also: you have a habit of writing conversation like this:

    '“Yup.” Confirmed Blaise.'

    This feels awkward and halting. The punctuation currently recommended is:

    '“Yup,” confirmed Blaise.' or '“Yup,” Blaise confirmed.' (Also lowercase after the comma, unless it is a name, as it is here.)

    Even exclamation points and question marks use lowercase for a dialog tag ("You!" he said.) The only time you use a capital letter after quoted text is for stage directions ("I'm leaving." She stomped through the door.) In that last case, the stage direction happened by the same person, but are not related to her talking. Note, if the stage direction is combined with a sentence tag, it is again lowercase: ("I'm leaving," she yelled, as she stomped through the door.)

    I hope that helps. The choppiness of the dialog sentence structure as it stands kept distracting me from what is really a fabulous, fun, enthralling story.

    I can't wait to read more!

    Author's Response: Glad you liked the chapter, and thanks for the tips. I changed Pasadena to Tuscany, and I'll work on the dialog. :0)
Title: Honesty 27 Jul 2009 5:29 am
Reviewer: joie (Anonymous) [Report This]
    awesome story - so well written and original. please finish it!

    Author's Response: Glad you like it!! It probably won't be finished anytime soon, but I can promise I'll continue it!
Title: Honesty 27 Jul 2009 2:57 am
Reviewer: DS (Anonymous) [Report This]
    This one was really great. I liked how Severus listened and understood. I really hope though that Harry will open up soon. It's difficult to see him so wary and closed off and Severus continually disappinted.

    Author's Response: Yeah, it is kinda sad. I think Sev pushed a little too hard on this one, though. I think I would've felt attacked, too, in Harry's situation. Anyway, Thanks for the review! Glad you liked the chapter!! :0)
Title: Honesty 27 Jul 2009 1:10 am
Reviewer: crazychick84 (Signed) [Report This]
    Aww it was fine, not depressing at all lol, I like the idea of Harry having provate lessons and even more time one on one with Severus, never can get enough of that :)

    Author's Response: LOL glad you like it. About half the people responding to that comment said 'yeah, it's depressing, but we like it anyway,' and about half said what you said. I average it out to 'parts are depressing, but the rest is happy enough to not make the whole chapter depressing'. What do you think? lol anyway, glad you like the one-on-one time idea. I was looking for a way to get Harry back with Snape without assigning more detentions, and that was it. :0)

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