Potions and Snitches
Snape and Harry Gen Fanfiction Archive

Title: Family Ties 23 May 2009 4:52 pm
Reviewer: Pandora (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh no! Harry don't do it!

    Just when they were making progress.

    I loved that line of Dumbledores. He would make a great Slytherin. Very sneaky, the way that he led Snape into that.

    What I really love about this story is how you jump right into the character's heads--how you just seem to come up with the right reactions, and you seem to be able to show us what motivates their actions.

    I'm scared to see what happens next. I really hope that Snape doesn't finally lose it. Please update soon.

    Author's Response: Thanks! I'm really glad you liked it. Next chappie should be out in just a few days. (3-4) :-)
Title: Family Ties 23 May 2009 3:54 pm
Reviewer: graynavarre (Signed) [Report This]
    Well done by Severus - but Harry is going to give him a real trial this year.

    I hope they all survive the next potions class.

    Author's Response: LOL Yeah I hope so, too. :-)
Title: Family Ties 23 May 2009 2:14 pm
Reviewer: crazychick84 (Signed) [Report This]
    Ooh I love a a defiant Harry lol, im so glad there was an update :)

    I will be looking forward to seeing what Harry is going to put poor Severus through next...it did make me laugh when Dumbledore pointed out all the things that Harry had done and was amazed that Severus had only lost his temper once :)

    Author's Response: :-) I'm glad you liked it. Yeah Snape's a little to hard on himself, I think. He screwed up in the beginning, but he's not a bad person...
Title: Family Ties 23 May 2009 7:58 am
Reviewer: NotEvenHere (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Great chapter. Your chapters are always so filled with sadness and yet, I can't help but think there's some hope for Harry. I'm glad that Snape is learning. Loved that line with Snape thinking he was trying (to Lily). And I like your Draco, which I hardly ever do. Thanks for a great chapter.

    Author's Response: Thanks! Next one should come out within a couple of days. :-)
Title: Family Ties 23 May 2009 7:11 am
Reviewer: LinerRocks (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh Harry! Stupid, stupid Harry. Poor, stupid Harry. Snape needs to teach him that not everyone hates him. Oy

    Author's Response: Yeah, he's not the sharpest tool in the shed. Most 11-year-olds aren't, I think. :-)
Title: Axis and Allies 20 May 2009 2:24 am
Reviewer: Meg (Anonymous) [Report This]
    If you don't update soon, no cookie for you >:D.

    Author's Response: I sorry. I had exams, then was at camp with no internets. I'm updating now, though!
Title: Axis and Allies 16 May 2009 4:22 am
Reviewer: Taryn (Signed) [Report This]
    TEN DAYS SINCE YOU LAST UPDATED.

    (Hint. Hint.)

    Author's Response: I'm sorry!!! Exams ate me. Gonna be a couple more days but I'm working on it. :-)
Title: Axis and Allies 15 May 2009 7:41 pm
Reviewer: Mervoparkite (Signed) [Report This]
    Impressive chapter, but you really do need to be murdered for the cliffie!

    V.

    Author's Response: I'll take that under advisement. I've heard Dr. Kevorkian is out of jail...any idea how to contact him? But then it's 'assisted suicide' under right to die, not murder...hmm...I'll consider the subject. You sure I have to be murdered?
Title: Axis and Allies 10 May 2009 3:59 pm
Reviewer: Rachael (Anonymous) [Report This]
    *Murders Rhiannan for the cliffie* No, seriously, this is amazing. Really, really good. Your writing style is delightful (maybe a little bumpy at points but overall great) and you really keep the reader's attention. =D. Excellent job so far!

    Author's Response: Thanks! Yeah, this last chappie I've kept re-editing because the italics were sloppy. Please let me know if there's an area you think could be written better - I can use all the help I can get and my beta's been real busy lately. :-) Thanks! And no murdering. It's not nice.
Title: Oops? 08 May 2009 12:32 pm
Reviewer: becky (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I've been enjoying your story until now. The dialogue started off a bit shaky, but cleared up. Then the last two chapters the plot has deteriorated into a 'Potter Pity Party.' Now your characterization is starting to slip. I imaging Harry to behave and speak like a child. I would also imagine Snape, Poppy, and Dumbledore to act as adults. I would expect these three educated and professional adults to behave and act as such. Do you honestly believe Poppy to use slang such as 'duh' and 'wanna' with her coworkers? Would Snape have the speech patterns of a silly teenybopper? I strongly suggest you make your characters act as their characters.

    Author's Response: While I appreciate constructive criticism, this could have been said a lot more politely. The point of reviews is to be helpful and supportive of writers, and to help us to improve, not to spew vitriol.

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