Ooo, exciting. I can already foresee fireworks between those two! You've done well with setting the scene so far and I'm definitely looking forward to the 'story' part. I would advise splitting up the paragraphs a bit more though, so they're easier to read through. Otherwise, great start!
Author's Response: Thanks alot! Is the paragraphing better now? You're one of two that mentioned it.
Great start! A little different twist to Harry's emotions as disrusting all adults and not wanting to appear able to be bullied. Very believable.
I'm lookng forward to more.
I really like your story so far, please update soon, nearly cant wait, Thank you for sharing
Excellent. I love the fics where Harry is confident.
A very good start, well done.
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| 15 Mar 2009 3:17 pm
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| Reviewer: Tasha (Anonymous)
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This is a really great start- keep up the good work. I'm really interested in where you take the story line. Can't wait until you update!
Ooh, good. I love Harry when he doesn`t let himself be pushed around. I love how you keep Snape and Harry in character. Great start.
I loved when Harry called Snape an asshole in his mind.
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| 15 Mar 2009 6:33 am
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| Reviewer: readersam (Anonymous)
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Good start. Hope to read more soon.
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