Title: Prologue
| 19 Aug 2010 5:50 am
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Reviewer: Deco (Anonymous)
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"as Lily ran to Harry’s room, the only place that was, by this time, swarming with Death Eaters."
That's 'wasn't'
“Move, Potter,” Voldemort said, sneering.“Not Harry, not Harry, please not Harry!”
Should be: “Move, Potter,” Voldemort said, sneering.
“Not Harry, not Harry, please not Harry!”
Very sweet and very tragic; I liked the way in which you built up the tension by using dramatic irony.
Title: Prologue
| 25 Mar 2009 7:02 am
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Reviewer: Missy Eye (Anonymous)
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very interesting story indeed!
Oh wow! Very nice. I love the scene with Harry and the peas! Harry sounds so adorable, and I could just picture James acting like that and getting Lily all riled up.
I`m looking forward to reading more from you.
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