I’m feeling all warm and fuzzy inside.
Love the start. I’m hooked.
Oh, this ending was adorable! I'm so glad that Harry and Severus were able to work out their differences. Thank you for this work. It was short and sweet, and filled with your talent! (~.^)
I'm conducting a summer action of reading all stories on PnS that have been completed, so I went through your story too!
The plot is interesting, although in my opinion, getting to Salazar was too easy. And what disappointed me is that you decided to skip all the events that have happened after return. I'd love to see some complicated development of Severus and Harry relationship, and you presented it kinda like "they came back and they were happily living after". But yeah, the plot is good. And the writing style is nice too. Hope you're gonna write more and longer :)
Author's Response: Thank you for such a thoughtful review. Yes, parts of the story are rushed. I wrote this for a Fic Fest here on P&S so there was a time constraint. Also I had never really meant for it to be a terribly in-depth story. I think I was writing 'Slave Child' at the time and it was my main interest; I only took a break to participate in the Fest. But yes, I did skip over some bits and it's not as in-depth as it could have been.
interesting concept but i loved it
loved this story. i knew there was another reason for Harry and Severus' little detour.
Author's Response: Thank you!
great story! Professor Trelawny-Dumbledore was good. And the character of Salazar was well thought out - a new take on how I would have seen him. :)
Very sweet story - and I liked the happy ending. I am curious why you didn't write about Harry and Severus going to talk to Godric like they said they would, but I daresay you were running short of the fest time limit? Well, anyway, I enjoyed reading through this very much and I don't think not visiting Godric detracted from the story in any way. My favourite part was definitely where Harry saw into Snape's memories and they both began to understand the other - inspired idea!
I've never read a fic featuring the founders before. I love this story! It's brilliant!
Author's Response: Thank you!
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