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Title: Orphans 21 Oct 2017 4:00 pm
Reviewer: Kjoyp (Signed) [Report This]
    At some point it would be lovely if you wrote a prologue, with James, Lily, Narcissa & Lucius. I know it would be a huge stretch, but it could be Narcissa (re)connecting with Sirius, perhaps over fear for both their babies. Maybe Sirius was watching Harry that day and he and Draco hit it off. Maybe some accidental magic to gift the other with a favorite toy, or levitating into the same playpen. Maybe Lucius knows Voldemort favors rituals with magical children and he fears for Draco.

    Just anything to tie them together at the beginning.
Title: Orphans 27 Mar 2011 10:30 pm
Reviewer: Was (Anonymous) [Report This]
    The banner is really nice, and the story is well written. Good job.
Title: Orphans 15 Dec 2010 11:52 am
Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous) [Report This]
    "apriciation" is spelled APPRECIATION.

    "one of the best decisions he'd every made" Think you meant EVER, not EVERY.

    "Vernon awoke and plundered his way downstairs" haha, I think if you knew what "plunder" meant, you'd get why it's funny. Maybe you meant "pounded" or "thundered"?

    ...too many other mistakes to note here...

    You could really use a beta or two.
Title: Orphans 06 Feb 2010 3:06 pm
Reviewer: penguins1 (Signed) [Report This]
    Wow - this was much better than I expected it to be!

    Author's Response:

    Penguins1,

    Thanks, I am very pleased to hear that!

    -Mel :)

Title: Orphans 13 Sep 2009 1:10 am
Reviewer: Ponytail Goddess (Signed) [Report This]
    Aw! It's so nice to see Harry not alone. Not that it's a good thing that they are abused, but it seems somewhat less terrible since he has a companion.

    -P.G.

    Author's Response:

    P.G,

    Yeah, I agree. What they go through is wrong and unfair but the fact that they have each other does provide them with comfort and makes it not as bad as it could of been for they know that at least one other person does care about them. Thanks.

    -Mel :)

Title: Orphans 08 Sep 2009 5:23 pm
Reviewer: amaitoru on fanficton.net (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I like this a lot and how close the two are.

    Author's Response:

    Amaitoru,

    Thank-you, I'm happy to hear that.

    -Mel :)

Title: Orphans 07 Sep 2009 4:29 pm
Reviewer: writeurlife (Signed) [Report This]
    this first chappie was very good.

    Author's Response:

    Writeurlife,

    Thanks, I'm glad you think so.

    -Mel :)

Title: Orphans 07 Sep 2009 1:06 pm
Reviewer: Becky (Anonymous) [Report This]
    you may want to consider getting a beta reader to help you with your punctuation. Much of it is either missing or wrong.

    Author's Response:

    Becky,

    Is it really that bad or noticeable? I did not find too many mistakes, but I will take the beta advice itno consideration. Thanks.

    -Mel :)

Title: Orphans 05 Sep 2009 6:35 pm
Reviewer: Pandora (Signed) [Report This]
    Ooh, nice start. This is an original concept, Draco and Harry both being in Gryffindor, and growing up with the Durseleys.

    Can't wait to see your video.

    Author's Response:

    Pandora,

    Thank-you! :) I'm glad it's original and I debated for a while involvng the hous situation and decided to put them both in the same house, but Slytherin didn't fit and I figured that if Draco had grown up differently he may not have had the "pureblood above all" slammed into his skull :P. The idea of the Dursleys is something I really enjoy, so I'm thrilled to hear that you like to to.

    The video is being annoying, but I am working on it and it should be up asap!

    -Mel :)

Title: Orphans 05 Sep 2009 4:13 pm
Reviewer: petuniac3 (Signed) [Report This]
    intriquing start

    Author's Response:

    Petuniac3,

    Thanks, I'm glad you think so.

    -Mel :)


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