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Reviews For Evan
Title: I'll Help You Carry On 19 May 2010 4:24 am
Reviewer: IchigoMirai (Signed) [Report This]
    this is still really good! poor harry... wonder what'll happen next... please update whenever you can
Title: And I'll Be Your Friend 29 Apr 2010 10:50 pm
Reviewer: LucySnapeDaughter-Of-Snape (Signed) [Report This]
    i love your story

    please update soon
Title: And I'll Be Your Friend 21 Feb 2010 9:18 am
Reviewer: HeartStar (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh Please update this story please I want to see where you take it thank you
Title: And I'll Be Your Friend 28 Jan 2010 7:08 pm
Reviewer: IchigoMirai (Signed) [Report This]
    this is really good!! wow... I think that would make anyone's heart stop if they come upon that image! please update whenever you get the chance...
Title: And I'll Be Your Friend 06 Jan 2010 2:43 pm
Reviewer: Fmh (Signed) [Report This]
    What a cliffee! I like the way that that the old harry is coming through with Evan. Thank you for updating I hope you feel better soon
Title: And I'll Be Your Friend 04 Jan 2010 12:35 am
Reviewer: icecream_effn_sundae (Signed) [Report This]
    great update, i cant wait to see what happens next!
    hope you update again soon :)
Title: And I'll Be Your Friend 03 Jan 2010 11:24 am
Reviewer: Elfwyn (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Wonderful story but I am a bit confused about something. In chapter one..."Severus nodded tightly. “Unfortunately, yes. Assuming that the potion takes you past the point where you were left with your aunt and uncle, you will behave like a child who has been abused. Any fears that you might have derived from that will be present, as will any insecurities. Worse, you won’t know where they are coming from.”"

    So from this we know Severus knew about Harry's abuse and that it started at the Dursley's at age 15 months, and yet so far Sev appears clueless as to the fact that this four year old Evan is an abuse victim and that many unknowns could trigger what he called 'insecurities' but seemed to be unformed flashbacks due to the amnesia effect of the potion.

    Severus is generally portrayed as a brilliant observant man if not an outright genius and this seems very out of character even if it makes the story flow.

    Author's Response:

    Thank you for bringing that plot hole to my attention.  Fortunatley, it's not something completely inconceived--in my mind, the situation is rather clear, I just... havn't gotten around to making it clear to everyone else, I guess.  

    Severus knows that Harry is abused, but he does not necessarily know the extent of the abuse.  He is, of course, brilliant, but that doesn't mean that he can figure everything ou instantaneously.  What he knows of Harry's abuse doens't include, for example, the fact that Harry was locked in a cupboard, so Evan hiding in a closet is strange to him. 

     In any case, I will be sure to make everything clear in later chapters so that it doesn't seem so strange and out of character, as you say.  Just keep in mind that everything in the story has happened in about a day and a night.  Snape hasn't had time to reflect on things. 

Title: And I'll Be Your Friend 03 Jan 2010 2:27 am
Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous) [Report This]
    poor evan, and poor snape. its all so confusing. this is a very interesting idea though and i am really enjoying snapes pov. keep up the great work!
Title: And I'll Be Your Friend 01 Jan 2010 8:23 am
Reviewer: Pandora (Signed) [Report This]
    Egads!!! A cliffie! Naughty naughty!

    Please update soon.

    Poor Evan. He doesn't even know why he's so insecure. I hope that Snape can help him become more self confident, and feel secure and cared for .
Title: And I'll Be Your Friend 31 Dec 2009 8:02 am
Reviewer: missny1 (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Poor evan is more worried about making a mess than hurting himself. What a great chpter, really shows how insecure evan is. Can't wait for nxt chapter. Happy almost new year.

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