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Title: Shifting Focus 21 Feb 2010 11:28 pm
Reviewer: lunaz (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Interesting plot line. In would like to see where you go with this. Good set up and like the interaction between Draco and Harry.

    Author's Response:

    Lunaz,

    Thanks, I'm glad to hear it. Thanks for the comments and review.

    -Mel :)

Title: Shifting Focus 21 Feb 2010 11:22 pm
Reviewer: tammy (Anonymous) [Report This]
    update soon

    Author's Response:

    Tammy,

    Will be updating soon, :P

    -Mel :)

Title: Shifting Focus 21 Feb 2010 8:32 pm
Reviewer: Sheila (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I really liked this first chapter and I simply love the idea of the rather unwilling pair of Harry and Draco with Snape as their father-figure. Hope you update soon!!!!

    Author's Response:

    Sheila,

    Thank-you, I'm thrilled to hear that. I will update very soon, thanks for the reviews.

    -Mel :)

Title: Shifting Focus 21 Feb 2010 6:43 pm
Reviewer: J. (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Hey, I'm interested in reading more, definitely, but one thing realllly was distracting - you have a bit of a tense switching problem especially in the last paragraph. Snape wondered... and then all of a sudden he "spots" them, not "he spotted them" and "frowns/eyes" instead of "frowned/eyed". If you keep it all in past tense, it becomes much smoother to read. Do you havea beta? That might help with little editing quirks. But your ideas are really interesting!

    Author's Response:

    J,

    Glad to hear it. Yes, I hadn't gone over it as thoroughly as I normally do with my fics, sorry about that. I have fixed the issues now and will be going over them as I usually do for the future. I do not want to use a beta. Thanks!

    -Mel :)

Title: Shifting Focus 21 Feb 2010 6:06 pm
Reviewer: graynavarre (Signed) [Report This]
    WooHoo, this looks great. I am really liking the premise and can't wait for more.

    Author's Response:

    Graynavarre,

    Thanks! Glad to hear it, will be updating very soon.

    -Mel :)

Title: Shifting Focus 21 Feb 2010 5:44 pm
Reviewer: starangel2106 (Signed) [Report This]
    I must admit you write the most intriguing stories. haha. I think this story might be funny. :)

    Author's Response:

    Starangel12106,

    Thanks, I always try to do something different. Heh, indeed :P

    -Mel :)


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