Indiana Jones references always brighten my day. That sequence was very amusing and inspired. I also liked Harry’s quiet contemplation l, as it deepened the significance of the room and space. Thanks for a terrific read.
I really enjoyed this chapter - the image of Harry pretending to be Indiana Jones while cleaning the office was awesome! Also loved the comparison between the Dursleys and the Malfoys.
Not sure I entirely understand what was meant by the line, "For all you've done for your friends at school - go look in a bloody mirror, Potter." though. Maybe I'm just sleep deprived.
Great chapter!
Very nice chapter. Snape was much cooler about the tattoo than I would have figured him to be. But one statement doesn't quite register properly with me. I didn't understand what Snape meant when he said, " 'For all you've done for your friends at school - go look in a bloody mirror, Potter,' Snape gruffed, eating the rest of his meal in silence." I mean, Harry has just said (I'm paraphrasing), 'Everybody just tells me I've got her eyes'. Then Snape tells him the same thing. But what did he mean by "For all you've done for your friends"?
Thank you.
Author's Response: Standing up for his friends and trying to help them. Like trying to help Hermione after she'd been petrified, and Ron after he'd been dog-napped to the Shrieking Shack. Lily Evans stood up for her friends and other students too. :) Thanks for the note!
| Title: Chapter 4 - Liar, Liar
| 18 Apr 2010 9:52 am
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| Reviewer: Kazza (Anonymous)
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This is a wonderful story! The almost-friendship between Severus and Harry is believable and very well written. I especially liked Severus's persona away from Hogwarts, which would suit his choice to live in a muggle neighbourhood.
I'm really liking this so far. I like how you have portrayed Snape being a bit more relaxed than his is at school. But since Harry is a wizard, could he just make his tattoo disappear whenever he wanted? Just wondering. Good job, update soon :)
Author's Response: Not during the summer. ;)
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| 18 Apr 2010 3:04 am
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| Reviewer: Snapesthe1 (Anonymous)
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Wonderful, wonderful story with perfect dialogue and characterizations. I look forward to each new chapter!
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| 17 Apr 2010 9:28 pm
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| Reviewer: manon (Anonymous)
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I really liked this chapter, as I like your story and your writing style.
And this is your story, just do your thing!!!!! Snape acts like Snape would do, he is not a cuddling teddy bear after all ;-)
Well done and please update soon!
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| 17 Apr 2010 7:51 pm
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| Reviewer: Chanel (Anonymous)
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I really like how the story is progressing! It's moving at a nice pace, and you are doing a good job of developing the characters and the plot. Keep it up!
PS the Indiana Jones part was cute!
| Title: Chapter 4 - Liar, Liar
| 17 Apr 2010 7:32 pm
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| Reviewer: Keats (Signed)
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Love this chapter the punishment was appropriate and just. Harry I don't think would think Severus was too harsh or unfair. Snape is being a stern but understanding guardian... Harry is testing his boundaries and Severus is being very patent.
I absolutely love the Indiana Jones part and when Severus called him Dr. Jones LOL. Fantastic... Love it.
Looking forward to the next chapter.
| Title: Chapter 4 - Liar, Liar
| 17 Apr 2010 9:40 am
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| Reviewer: nina (Anonymous)
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nice story, but you should make it a bit clearer, that what Snape is doing as a "punishment" to Harry is nothing else but torture, even if it is not a very strong form of it. Especially with the ending of the chapter some readers might think that such a behaviour towards children is ok or even normal. You should make it clearer that this is child abuse just as much as what the Dursleys are doing in your story lest someone would think it ok or even do it to their own children.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Respectfully, I don't agree with the opinion that it is torture. While having mustard on your tongue for three or four minutes is definitely not comfortable, it is not unlike having your mouth washed out with soap for swearing. Gross, disgusting, embarrassing, but oh do you learn. In any event, Snape doesn't do this again in the story - it was already planned that this is the only time.
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