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Reviews For The Definition of Home
I think what I really like is the way you've portrayed Harry. His state at fifteen is that kind of disorganised defiance that teen kids get up to generally harmless, but certainly pushing the boundaries. It's a risk taking stage of development so I think Harry trying to escape control and experiment with drugs and sexuality is to be expected, and summer is the perfect time for him to rebel. I think you've contrasted this stage interestingly with Harry's younger self, his uncertainty and introvertedness coming to the fore and really indicating the reasons for his older personality. I loved the my dad's death eater and the bogeymen has red eyes, nicely crafted. Snape is also very interesting, I like the more relaxed Snape you've presented us. He understands Harry's rebellion, because he lived it in his own way maybe, and probably knows how silly it is. I'm interested to see more of Snape's relationship with Dumbledore as well as Harry. I think your settings are written well too, I really got a feeling for the bustling high street shopping of Stockport and Amsterdam has been nothing but a delight to read. Personally, I feel your approach to swearing, drugs, sex and alcohol are all fine. Even if an individual doesn't personally they certainly couldn't accuse you of glorification of endorsement. Not to mention the position of drugs in society is not internationally equal, and is still open to debate. As for swearing in fic I'm never bothered by either its presence nor its absence as long and the author doesn't do this : F$@* which is assault on the eyes ^__^. Commit or commit not to I say. So excited to see the next part, I wish I could've held off reading this part so that wait would feel shorter.
I love your Harry. He's so mischevious and funny and sweet, and just a typical teenage boy, who can't stay out of trouble And Snape. You keep him so Snape-like. All stern and forbidding, but deep down he's staring to care about Harry's welfare. I think that Harry really needs someone like Snape to keep him in line, and keep him safe. The boy is a trouble magnet! And reckless and just really needs someone to protect him and make him feel safe and cared for, while giving him boundaries and firm guidance. If Snape can give Harry that firm hand that he needs, without resorting to insulting and demeaning him, he'd be just the sort of father-figure that Harry needs. Great story!! I'm so anxious to see if Snape turns Harry into potions ingrediants, for this latest stunt!! Too cute.
Will Snape want to deage Harry again right away? Fantastic story and build up. Fabulous job. I am so glad that you are posting it here on the site. You probably should put a cp warning on it on fanfiction.net. Just write "cp warning" or something like that in the summary.
Great chapter!
This was an interesting chapter. Snape might not admit it, but he cares somewhat for Harry. I'm seeing proof, and anyway, he did look in the parenting section at the bookstore. ;-) I'm really curious about Snape in this story. I think he's got some interesting, probably sad, backstory that is being eluded to slowly. I'm sure we'll find out eventually. You have a lovely story here. I feel rather selfish, because I always want more when I finish a new chapter. But I should just take a hint and go work on my own story, as I have become quite a slacker. ;-) Keep up the great work. I always look forward to your updates! :D
Interesting story, really! Thank you for this fast and awesome update! |
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