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Reviews For Just Harry
Take, for example, this sentence: "Harry... proceeded to step out of the alley and peer around at the streets that looked vastly different to several hours ago." The phrase is "different from" not different to", and written as is, the sentence literally compares "the streets" to "several hours". I believe your intention was to compare Harry's surroundings at the moment to that of several hours ago. These mistakes can deter some readers but are easily fixed with a fellow editor or a careful read-through. The story's plot is wonderful. The details from Harry's point of view are captivating and heartwarming. I definitely hope you'll continue this soon. I'm looking forward to more :)
I can't wait for the next chappie. Author's Response: Yeah. And it is indeed a very dangerous situation for someone his age to be in, he's been very lucky so far. Yay, and will update soon.
Snape will a vendetta when he finds out whats been happening to his son. Author's Response: :) Severus will indeed be surprised, among other things but I won't say much. Will be updating soon. Thanks for the review.
But why Harry feel so strong for a man that (for all intend and purpose) left him behind? Not that I want him hate Severus...although, in his place, I would.I would meet him,have some answers ...but then would prefer to be adopted and never see him again...anyway I'm not him^-^ please, go on. Author's Response: Thanks! :). And the word/concept "father" bring comfort to Harry without him really thinking on the entire meaning of it. At the moment the man is his hope for escaping what he left behind, but some harsh realities will come back once he stop living in the moment and actually gets a chance to really think about it as a whole. However, as you said you would, he does want to meet him and have answers, so that is part of his main priority as well. But yeah, I know what you mean, but Harry is just living in the moment right now and had given up on having faith in being adopted and thinks that if he finds his father, everything will be okay. Thanks for the review.
Fabsx Author's Response: I agree. Hehe, Severus is concerned although he doesn't understand the cause yet. naturually, being concerned is a threat to him :P. Thanks, glad to hear it. And I know they don't use the $ sign, however it's all I could do with my keyboard etc.
Author's Response: Well he will be surprised, to say the least. As for his reactions, you'll have to wait and see, but joy won't be the first on the list, that's for sure. |
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