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Reviews For Marks of Days Gone By
Author's Response: Thank you.
I wouldn't say you "turn a cauldron on". More like you "light a cauldron". This threw me for a loop, and put a bump in the smoothness of the reading. And now for the finale... Author's Response: I'll make a note of that and try not to confuse it in the future. Thanks! :)
The one thing that stood out for me in this chapter is the rather abrupt change in Harry's personality. I understand that he'll be somewhat AU since he's all into Potions now, even so far as to quit Quidditch, but it seemed like you didn't go fare enough in depth about his change. Almost like one second he's trying hard to do well in Potions, and the next instant he's gone berserk and quitting the team on a whim. This I find very out of character, at least without the reader's seeing a little more progression towards that point. ForEll Author's Response: You're right. I should have developed his character more and explained his changes more. Thanks for the review.
Author's Response: The ending is suppose to be slightly confusing. Thanks for your review!
Author's Response: That's how I thought about it. Harry wanted comfort of some kind and his mind creates it for him. I might write another story filling in all those years sometimes. Thanks for your reviews!
Author's Response: H/Hr is sweet, I'm glad you thought it was cute. Of course Snape wouldn't show Harry anything other than stern, work and revolusion. My teachers all teach us above what we should now. My math teacher was teaching us stuff four years above our level, but we all got it. I think that Snape likes seeing people squirm, it's in his nature.
Author's Response: Thanks, I tried to keep his as in character as possible since the story is really OOC.
(Another nitpick: "His greaving was over with." Grieving, I suppose?) All in all, it was a wonderful story. Well done! Author's Response: Great, the mystery is suppose to be there. And yes, I did mean Grieving. That you very much for your reviews!
Nitpick: "But by the time the potion, a simple burn slave, was finished.." I believe it's "salve" rather than "slave." :) Author's Response: I like mature!Harry and sad!Snape. I really like Hr/H and even through you don't really I'm glad you can still find it right in this stroy. :) You're right though, I tried studying with my former boyfriend a few times, it never ended up working. I did not mean "burn slave" I don't really even want to think about what that implies.
Author's Response: According to my brother, that's how teenage boys think. MAybe quitting Quidditch wasn't the best idea, I just needed a way to show how seriously Harry was taking this. |
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