Potions and Snitches
Snape and Harry Gen Fanfiction Archive

Title: Chapter 2 03 Jul 2010 12:09 am
Reviewer: ForgottenEllipses (Signed) [Report This]
    Whoops, I forgot to add that I absolutely LOVED Snape's comment at the beginning - it was so Snape, just perfect!

    Author's Response: Thank you.
Title: Chapter 2 03 Jul 2010 12:08 am
Reviewer: ForgottenEllipses (Signed) [Report This]
    Okay, I liked this one more than the fist; more action.

    I wouldn't say you "turn a cauldron on". More like you "light a cauldron". This threw me for a loop, and put a bump in the smoothness of the reading.

    And now for the finale...

    Author's Response: I'll make a note of that and try not to confuse it in the future. Thanks! :)
Title: Chapter 1 02 Jul 2010 11:57 pm
Reviewer: ForgottenEllipses (Signed) [Report This]
    Very nice start! I like how you've expounded upon the Challenge.

    The one thing that stood out for me in this chapter is the rather abrupt change in Harry's personality. I understand that he'll be somewhat AU since he's all into Potions now, even so far as to quit Quidditch, but it seemed like you didn't go fare enough in depth about his change. Almost like one second he's trying hard to do well in Potions, and the next instant he's gone berserk and quitting the team on a whim. This I find very out of character, at least without the reader's seeing a little more progression towards that point.

    ForEll

    Author's Response: You're right. I should have developed his character more and explained his changes more. Thanks for the review.
Title: Chapter 3 02 Jul 2010 9:58 pm
Reviewer: frodolove12 (Signed) [Report This]
    Very good fic :) Though the ending was a bit confusing. I like the H/Hr relationship. Very cute :D But I don't think Harry would have quit Quidditch earlier on. But I guess you needed to do that for the story. Great job :)

    Author's Response: The ending is suppose to be slightly confusing. Thanks for your review!
Title: Chapter 3 02 Jul 2010 7:06 pm
Reviewer: Ivy-Green (Signed) [Report This]
    OMG! I've got chills! So...Snape was dead dead, and Harry was just seeing what he kinda wanted to be? He thought all the time that it was Snape, but it was really him? I've got CHILLS!!! And Harry's children were in Slytherin? I want to read all about this, but I can't because it's finished!! DX His children are Lily and Severus? That's cute!! I really like that a lot! But poor Snape is dead. :( Gone but not forgotten...Great work N_Forest!! :D

    Author's Response: That's how I thought about it. Harry wanted comfort of some kind and his mind creates it for him. I might write another story filling in all those years sometimes. Thanks for your reviews!
Title: Chapter 2 02 Jul 2010 6:59 pm
Reviewer: Ivy-Green (Signed) [Report This]
    OMG!! Harry and Hermione? How sweet! And Snape teaching Harry was cute. I like that Snape was pleased, but was NOT going to reveal that for anything in the world! And I like how Snape taught the kids above what they maybe they should be learning. I had teachers like that. But I bet he LOVES seeing them squirm!! XD HAHA!! Another awesome chappie!! :D

    Author's Response: H/Hr is sweet, I'm glad you thought it was cute. Of course Snape wouldn't show Harry anything other than stern, work and revolusion. My teachers all teach us above what we should now. My math teacher was teaching us stuff four years above our level, but we all got it. I think that Snape likes seeing people squirm, it's in his nature.
Title: Chapter 1 02 Jul 2010 6:37 pm
Reviewer: Ivy-Green (Signed) [Report This]
    "Those of you who find getting a passing grade. . .difficult will most certainly fail your OWL, unless of course you are able to grow a brain."-Oh Snape, you always know just what to say! XD Hilarious line!! There were several times in this where I just couldn't help but laugh! Great work!

    Author's Response: Thanks, I tried to keep his as in character as possible since the story is really OOC.
Title: Chapter 3 02 Jul 2010 4:06 pm
Reviewer: Ramelia (Signed) [Report This]
    Lovely ending to the story. I'm not sure I understood what the last line implied, but I like the mystery. :)

    (Another nitpick: "His greaving was over with." Grieving, I suppose?)

    All in all, it was a wonderful story. Well done!

    Author's Response: Great, the mystery is suppose to be there. And yes, I did mean Grieving. That you very much for your reviews!
Title: Chapter 2 02 Jul 2010 4:02 pm
Reviewer: Ramelia (Signed) [Report This]
    I'm really enjoying your characterisation of Harry who acts, well, maturely. And though I couldn't see Snape crying over a photo album, no matter how bitter the memories, it was a lovely scene. Surprisingly enough, though I'm not big on the H/Hr pairing, it does come about naturally in your story, so I'm not complaining. :) About time Harry found something that would take his mind off from all that studying, though I don't know if that's possible with Hermione around. :D

    Nitpick: "But by the time the potion, a simple burn slave, was finished.." I believe it's "salve" rather than "slave." :)

    Author's Response:

    I like mature!Harry and sad!Snape. I really like Hr/H and even through you don't really I'm glad you can still find it right in this stroy. :) You're right though, I tried studying with my former boyfriend a few times, it never ended up working. I did not mean "burn slave" I don't really even want to think about what that implies.

Title: Chapter 1 02 Jul 2010 3:52 pm
Reviewer: Ramelia (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh, I like the idea of a hardworking Harry. Figures that he would try to prove himself to Snape exclusively - Snape definitely gives him the motivation to, doesn't he? :) I couldn't, however, imagine Harry quitting Quidditch because he wanted to study so much, though, because it's something that would've kept him sane in the middle of all that mental exertion, you know? But apart from that, it's a lovely start, and this part was my favourite: "Harry had three goals in life. Snog Cho Chang, become an Auror and kill Voldemort, not necessarily in that order." Hehe. :)

    Author's Response: According to my brother, that's how teenage boys think. MAybe quitting Quidditch wasn't the best idea, I just needed a way to show how seriously Harry was taking this.

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