| Title: Friends?
| 08 Jan 2011 3:48 am
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| Reviewer: mayapple (Anonymous)
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This chapter would be improved by:
* Less descriptions of pretty colors
* More plot
Author's Response: Thank you, I will definitely take this into account in my next chapter.
All I can say is that I was prepared to continue this story, and so made up for it with too much descriptive paragraphs. Definitely the next chapter will be more progressive.
Thanks for the review :)
Oh, this is SO interesting!!! I'm really loving this story! Can't wait for the next update!
Author's Response: Thank you for the review, I'm in the progress of writing the next chapter. :)
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