Draco be like: I messed with Neville's not my own! I don't know how to make it lie, I just know how to make it not work!
Slytherins and Gryffindors be like: WTF just happened? Nobody knows? Okay, least we're all just equally confused.
Snape: having a meltdown off stage.
Harry: having a meltdown ON stage.
"...hope dangling on a string,like the slow spinning redemption he'd always wanted..." I love your turns of phrase! Terrific opening chapter!
Excellent - that was a stunning divergence from a perfectly normal day, wasn't it?
| Title: Paternis Sentimentis
| 08 Mar 2011 8:34 pm
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| Reviewer: projectjay (Anonymous)
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Wow! Great start JA.
Poor Harry. I really hope that Snape comes around. Harry "does" deserve a family. Even if it "is" Snape! LOL!
OMG. As wonderful as ever. That was an awful way to start the story, keeping all of us(well, at least me) biting our nails and lips, crossing our fingers waiting for more, wondering what will happen... ARGH. Wonderful wonderful wonderful.
| Title: Paternis Sentimentis
| 04 Feb 2011 4:55 am
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| Reviewer: lex (Anonymous)
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Harry seems a bit needy, but overall, a decent start.
I really like this so far! Snape also seemed very in character. I like how Voldemort isn't a threat and you're just focusing on Harry's thoughts and feelings. Those are my favorite type of stories. :]
Someone is definitely in denial. Harry's actually much calmer about the situation than I expected him to be, but I really like that. Great start.
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