| Title: What's Owed
| 04 Apr 2013 9:21 am
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| Reviewer: Shadow of flame (Anonymous)
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Love it! Really would wish to see some of that time in the ten month jump, though. great job of creating Mark and Harry's relationship.
This is really good and I like it. I wish you had gone more onto what happened exactly because it is interesting. I don't really know the Mark character well and it actually took me a bit to recognize the name. It's hard to believe that this is 29 pages. I think you are very talented at writing and I think you should do something with the middle like a side story that should be read with this.
Peace!
CheyRain
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Yeah, it was meant to be shorter and more to the point, just focusing on Harry's interaction with Mark and Severus. I wanted to leave some things up to the reader's imagination such as what went on during the trials. Maybe I will eventually write a side story to go with that.
I really liked this story, especially the last section. I laughed out loud at Mark's "Just testing! It works great!"
And your story graphic is excellent!
Author's Response: Thanks!
| Title: Nothing But The Rain
| 24 Apr 2011 6:45 am
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| Reviewer: Rye (Signed)
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I think this is a good story, however, it would be nice to know more of how their relationships evolved, between Mark and Harry, and between them and Severus. Will you ever make a sequel, or a longer version of this? I specially enjoyed the last paragraph.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I wanted to leave some things up to the reader's imagination. I won't be making a sequel to this.
| Title: What's Owed
| 23 Apr 2011 10:14 am
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| Reviewer: heartstar (Anonymous)
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I did I really did injoys this story. *S* I love how you had it end.
| Title: What's Owed
| 19 Mar 2011 9:53 pm
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| Reviewer: Spike (Anonymous)
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These was really nice. Somehow, you left me wishing that there was a longer version of this story, with how their relationship with Severus evolved, and more "brother" actions shown.
| Title: What's Owed
| 06 Mar 2011 8:33 pm
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| Reviewer: Chelle (Anonymous)
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cute, sweet, with just the right amount of angst...thanks
| Title: What's Owed
| 06 Mar 2011 11:06 am
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| Reviewer: heartstar (Anonymous)
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oh very nice very nice indeed! I loved this story...
| Title: What's Owed
| 23 Feb 2011 6:58 am
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| Reviewer: me (Anonymous)
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That's just great! I'm waiting for your next story.
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