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Title: What's Owed 20 Feb 2011 8:26 pm
Reviewer: Owlish Dawlish (Anonymous) [Report This]
    The beginning was very good, and really started off very well, but the ending felt kind of tacked on and rushed, like you didn't want to be bothered detailing anymore about it.

    Author's Response: I'm sorry to hear that readers feel that way about the story.  I rather liked the ending and had planned it that way from the start.  The reader wasn't meant to see all that happened between the beginning and the end, only the parts that I felt were key.  I feel that sometimes less is better.  Thank you for your input though.
Title: I'm With You 20 Feb 2011 8:21 pm
Reviewer: Morgana (Signed) [Report This]
    Good chapter; I loved Ron and Hermione's argument (not to mention Ginny's pert comment about their feelings). I wonder whether Mark Evans father would risk behaving so abusively in a public place, however; there are always policemen at Kings Cross and it's very crowded- abuse tends to happen behind closed doors.

    Author's Response: Good point.  People are crazy though.  I don't know how it is there in England, but I've occasionally seen people here in the US in packed grocery stores or public parking lots yelling at their kids, cursing at their kids, or spanking their kids (although I don't considder mild spanking as abuse if used appropriately) amongst other things.  I think that if somebody is abusive behind closed doors they either really don't care about their children, or will have a hard time keeping that under wraps while out in public.  It's a behavior and behavior is hard to change and therefor would show itself in private and in public to some extent.  Great insight though.
Title: Nothing But The Rain 20 Feb 2011 8:16 pm
Reviewer: Morgana (Signed) [Report This]
    Very interesting chapter; it's interesting how you've mirrored Mark and Harry's lives and I can see Harry going out of his way to help a younger, more vulnerable child. Snape's reaction is very typical- his prejudice against Harry makes him rather blind.
Title: Nothing But The Rain 20 Feb 2011 8:15 pm
Reviewer: snapeswidow (Signed) [Report This]
    Lovely first chapter. Can't wait to see where you take this.
Title: What's Owed 20 Feb 2011 8:05 pm
Reviewer: Grangerover (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Did you know that there's another story on this site entitled "What's Owed"? At first, I thought this was that particular story until I clicked on it, lol.

    Anyway, I didn't really care for this story. It was extremely cheesy. The ending was very rushed and entirely too fluffy: my teeth are aching from the overload of saccharinity. I would recommend taking more time in the future to craft a better, more believable and less mawkish finish.

    Good luck with your future fics! :-)

    Author's Response:

    I did not know there was another story with this title.

    I won't be apologizing though.  I do not think it is cheesy in the least, neither rushed or overly sweet.  I took a great deal of time crafting this story, and think it is very believable.  While I will thank you for the review, I will also say that if you're going to give criticism, make it constructive.  Examples would go a long way in that regard, and a review like this does nothing whatsoever to make a writer a better one.  I guess your review seemed more like a flame than constructive criticism.  Thanks regardless.

Title: What's Owed 20 Feb 2011 6:43 pm
Reviewer: Sevie Prince (Signed) [Report This]
    Hello;) I like it very much, but ending... sorry but it look like you wanted post it too fast, I would like a confrontation Snape- Harry,and apologizes.
Title: What's Owed 20 Feb 2011 5:19 pm
Reviewer: Moon_Willow (Signed) [Report This]
    Another piece of wonderful work. It's nice, loved it. It's not rushed at all. It's a kinda nice epilogue. ^^ Good work!

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