| Title: Settling In
| 03 Aug 2011 12:41 am
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| Reviewer: Vanime (Anonymous)
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I am enjoying this - I have hopes that Professor Snape will soften once he sees Harry's medical records from Poppy of the abuse he's gotten over the years.
I look forward to the next chapter!
| Title: Settling In
| 30 Jul 2011 4:25 pm
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| Reviewer: Gladoo89 (Anonymous)
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So far, I like a lot your story. I can't wait to see what will happen in the next chapter. Please update soon! ^^
| Title: Settling In
| 06 Jun 2011 12:43 am
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| Reviewer: Kristi (Anonymous)
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Please, you have to continue this! It has so much promise to be a great story.
| Title: Settling In
| 22 Apr 2011 10:11 am
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| Reviewer: Dinah (Anonymous)
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I hope you haven't abandoned this story, I've really been enjoying it! Poor Harry, I hope Snape figures out he's not a spoiled brat soon.
Such a good chapter of course!
Snape really is being mean, but I have faith that all will be well with time! :D
I can't wait to read more of this story! I'm sure it'll turn out really great! There re so many possibilities!!
I think Snape will have a lot to think about once Poppy does the exam, maybe just maybe he will realize that Harry isn't the spoiled prince he thinks he is.
| Title: Settling In
| 27 Mar 2011 4:33 am
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| Reviewer: Kristi (Anonymous)
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Can't wait to read the next chapter.
Aww poor Harry. He's so confused and scared. Poor kid.
Of course, Snape isn't too happy either, is he? This is going to be a wild ride for these two!
You seem to use quite a few commas to extend sentences, where you should be using periods and ending them. Here is one such example:
"Severus’ scowl deepened, he and the boy were now linked, master and apprentice."
It should probably be written like this:
"Severus’ scowl deepened. He and the boy were now linked, master and apprentice."
But your storyline is enthralling. I hope you update again soon! Good job. :-)
Author's Response: I appreciate your comments, very constructive. I will keep in mind the POV changes and run on sentences in my coming chapters.
| Title: Settling In
| 27 Mar 2011 3:54 am
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| Reviewer: Shadow (Anonymous)
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Interesting plan of the day =D I think that the Pomfry's physical exam will be one big surprise for Snape...
Nice chapter =o) I'm looking forward the next one =o)
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