| Title: Chapter 1 Requests Present and Past
| 18 Aug 2011 10:18 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Interesting tht you hve Severus say that he htes Jmes more thn voldemort i wonder if that is true! I don't gree with your reading of Dumbledore but great story
| Title: Chapter 8 Fateful Meetings
| 10 Aug 2011 3:37 pm
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| Reviewer: Kristi (Anonymous)
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You misspelled two names in this chapter; you forgot the "g" in Kingsley and Madame Maxime's first name is Olympe, not Olympia. I look forward to the next chapter!
| Title: Chapter 6 Desired Questions and Unwanted Answers
| 02 Aug 2011 3:47 pm
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| Reviewer: Kristi (Anonymous)
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I do believe that Mrs. Figg is a Squib and not a squid. This chapter was better than the last few in terms of errors but there were still quite a few
| Title: Chapter 6 Desired Questions and Unwanted Answers
| 30 Jul 2011 6:03 am
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| Reviewer: jaw12801 (Signed)
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Hi -
I'm looking forward to Umbridge's meeting with Voldemore (please tell me that's where this is going - I'd love to "see" it).
| Title: Chapter 5, Tell Me Lies, Sweet Little Lies
| 27 Jul 2011 9:03 pm
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| Reviewer: mworth1019 (Anonymous)
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nice and creepy voldieshorts you have... a little to late but none the less snape is trying to protect harry...
This is getting really good! OH! An idea: when the Order goes to retrieve Harry-have them find him in a bloody mess without the Dursleys home! You could have Vernon beat Harry because fo the Dementors' attack on Dudley-and since he knows that they were after him-he would naturally blame Harry for it. You could even have Petunia refusing to treat him because Dudley had yet to be treated for his injuries and sicne she believes his soul and mind are damaged beyond repair-you could have her be the nastiest she has ever been. Then leave with Vernon and Dudley. Snape could find this out in a discussion with Harry after he and Dumbledore see him wake up after helping him heal. Just a thought.
Nice! Please update soon!
Part of this chapter at the Malfoys' was duplicated.
| Title: Chapter 4 The Mirror’s Shattered Shards
| 03 Jul 2011 6:53 pm
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| Reviewer: Vanime (Anonymous)
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You need to double check this chapter - you repeated the story twice - it happens right after Snaper apparates to see the Dark Lord
Author's Response: Thanks. I didn't realize I had made that mistake.
Um there were a few small problems. It's not dissipated, it's disapperated. In chapter three (or two, depends on how you look at it) Uncle Vernon said they had no work effect instead of ethic. This is good and I like it. I hope you update soon!
Peace!
CheyRain
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