Ria, this was excellent. From the quotes at the beginning to the last line written, wonderfully done. I can't wait for the next chapter. My heart is breaking for Harry but also for Hermione. Ron, you have made Ron, the beacon of hope. Well done. Bravo.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! So often Hermione is the optimistic one, but I always saw her as a realist, I decided Ron deserved his due. :)
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| 01 Aug 2011 11:13 pm
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| Reviewer: lunaz (Anonymous)
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Wow this intro got to me. I am looking forward to the next part.
Author's Response: Hopefully, it'll be out soon! Thank you!
| Title: Moving
| 01 Aug 2011 9:24 pm
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| Reviewer: Elfwyn (Anonymous)
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A powerful start that is truly well written with a great hook. Your use of descriptive words and writing style is truly fantastic and wrings emotions from the readers. Look forward to more.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm blushing :)
I loved it! Poor Harry, I can easily see how things just overwhelmed him and he couldn't stand it anymore. I'm glad that people have realized how much they do care for him, even if it's a bit late, and I feel so sorry for Ron and Hermione lost in their grief and fear. I like how Ron can sense that Harry is still alive though. Ron has always seemed intuitive to me, so I think that really fits.
Now Severus just needs to find Harry. It's dangerous for a kid out on the streets like that. Looking forward to more!
Author's Response: It's as the Joni Mitchell songs goes, "Don't it always seem to go that you don't know what you got 'till it's gone." Sometimes, it takes something horrid to remember that someone is just as human as you are; it's a concept I've wanted to write about for a while. :) Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! :)
I liked it! It seems very interesting. Waiting for more.
Author's Response: Thank you!!
Another interesting and different premise. Your writing is lovely and flows beautifully making me want to read more.
Author's Response: Thank you! I really like plots that are a bit out of the ordinary, keeps it interesting!
I love your writing style! Good story so far
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
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