I love how they worked together to bring down the dragon: never speaking, always knowing exactly what the other needed. The different tense was a very nice change of pace, I believe. It created a sense of action and presence and really heightened the sense of anticipation during the battle. It gave a feeling of "what's going to happen next?" like I was really in the moment. The dramatic effect was very well placed in the plot you presented. Thanks for sharing!
Gotta say, I love Good Manipulative Dumbledore, he reminds me of Gandalf. I loved this.
So good to read this again.
You had me mesmerised with this story. I love it, there are no other words, that could possibly describe how much I enjoyed it. Keep on going like this, you definitely have talent.
story was good, sequel would also be good
Title: Reciprocity
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Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Very interesting and imaginative thank you
Just as good the second time reading it. Thank you.
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