Wow, this was different for you, but you did a great with it. :D Now will they connect without being forced?
I would normally avoid anything written in present tense too, but your story notes persuaded me to give it a go. I think it worked, especially on the dragon battle scene. I don't think I'd have stuck with anything longer though.
Bravo! I agree with you about the challenges of present tense. However, you have used the strengths of present tense (explaining motivation and emotion) wonderfully here. Again, Bravo!
I wonder if it's gone...whats happening lol
A review for a Snape then.. :p
I enjoyed reading this, there was good flow so I wasn't distracted till the end.
This sentence stands strong, ""I thought you weren't going to help me sir," he says quietly, eyes on the floor."
Looking forward!
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