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Reviews For Win The War: Consanguinity
Author's Response: Hello. She wasn't really too old for a child. According to HP wiki Eileen Prince was born between 1932-1943, I've taken 1943, so when Sev was born, she was 17, just after school, and when Harry was born, she was 37, and now she would have 52 if she wasn't dead. My Tobias like she is 52, or 53. Sev will apperar in 3th chapter (prolog doesn't count) but confrontation between him and Harry will be in 4th Thanks for review ;)
Author's Response: thank you for review ;) and what do you think, what Sev should think of this? What would be in character?
Author's Response: Thanks, but confrontation Harry-Snape will be in 4th or 5th chapter ;)
(If I'm right, you're doing a really good job of building the situation slowly.) Also, you may wish to hint at what Dumbledore's awareness (or lack thereof) of the situation is. It feels a bit peculiar to leave it unsaid. In any case, again, really enjoying! I look forward to the next chapter. Post soon? ;) Author's Response: Thank you! I'm happy that you noticed that Tobias' signs. And don't worry I'll show what the other characters think of this. I really thought much of plot;) I'll post next chapter in week or two ;)
I really Hope Toby isnt gonna be abusive..poor Harry if he is..either way you've gained a fan. Author's Response: Thank you ;)
I like this story so far. But I must say that it has a little mystake, you wrote that Harry was born june 31, in the books, it is july 31. If in your story, Harry is born at the and of june, there's no ploblem but june has only 30 days. See you soon Phoenix 5 Author's Response: Sorry, It was meant to be july. Thanks for pointing it out and for review!
Author's Response: Thank you;) And sorry, but sev will probably in fourth chapter;)
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