I loved the Sev-Harry interactions in the chapter but the nighttime bit was most definitely my favorite. "Keep still or I will feed you beans." Although I felt the Fate bit was a bit weird as she seemed close to a MarySue to me, but the rest of the chapter was awesome.
Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback. How, may I ask, does she seem MarySue? It's confusing for me, because I know her backstory and have carefully creatred her character though she IS very powerful and thus can do things others can't. Could you help me by explaining what you thought was Mary Sue about her, or what gave that impression?
Thank you for the review. I liked that part too. Expect more in the future ;)