Aww, well I can't wait to see what happens next! Please update again soon!
| Title: Chapter 3: When in Doubt Deny Everything
| 04 Mar 2014 8:41 am
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| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed)
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Poor kid. I am so glad that Snape is thinking of him and is there for him to help set him straight.
| Title: Chapter 5: Can you Keep a Secret?
| 04 Mar 2014 8:34 am
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| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed)
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Oh wow, I didn't expect Draco and the other Sytherins to be so close to Harry at all. That came as a big shock. it seemed out of character without having seen for ourselves how this could have happened. What happened to Harry's Gryffindor friends?
Author's Response: I hinted at it, in the previous chapters...they're are instances where Harry's thinking about them and knowing they're worrying about him but he doesnt care. As for Gryfindor friends, I was really never a fan of Hermione, she tends to get pushed away in all of my stories. Ron...I dont know exactly, I like his character sometimes..but I'll have to see where he plays into this one.
| Title: Chapter 5: Can you Keep a Secret?
| 03 Mar 2014 11:56 pm
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| Reviewer: Lili (Anonymous)
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This is great! Can't wait for more!
| Title: Chapter 4: What is Trust?
| 02 Mar 2014 1:35 pm
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| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed)
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Wow, what an emotional mess Harry is is. I am glad that Snape is there for him, even if he doesn't realize it yet.
| Title: Chapter 2: Sometimes it's just not Worth it
| 02 Mar 2014 1:12 pm
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| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed)
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I love the confrontation and the description of how Harry feels. Well done. I really like your Dumbledore as well.
| Title: Chapter 1: Happy Place
| 02 Mar 2014 10:35 am
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| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed)
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Oh, poor Harry!!! But where are Ron and Hermione? Surely they care. I loved your descriptions and the part with Lily, Sirius and James. I am so glad that Snape found Harry. He really needs help! Go, Snape, go!
| Title: Chapter 5: Can you Keep a Secret?
| 02 Mar 2014 9:43 am
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| Reviewer: Outlawgal (Signed)
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I liked this chapter. I like that Harry and the Slytherins get along so well. I also like that it is Neville and Luna that are close to him and not Ron and Hermione.
I think Harry is starting to feel better a tiny bit but we know that won't last long since other eise we would have 17 chapters....Right Right :P
Author's Response: You're very right lol..on all fronts. Ron is coming back though, I like Ron, even if he had his bad moments...as for Hermione, well she's there kinda lol
| Title: Chapter 5: Can you Keep a Secret?
| 02 Mar 2014 5:40 am
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| Reviewer: cckeimig (Signed)
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I'm enjoying this story. I know you've done a lot of work on the grammar, but unfortunately there are still a lot of tense and word choice errors.
Still, it's a good story and I'm looking forward to more as you continue to repost chapters.
Author's Response: Hi, yes they are there, this isnt a work of published fiction, it's fanfiction. Gone however are the rundown sentences and bad dialogue. If you had read the previous version like some of the other readers, you would know, this baby is ALOT better. Like it was so bad before it took away from the read. And I applaud the readers who muddled through it and stuck with it, it was encouraging. As it was I can't get a beta, and I dont really want one. They're schedules and mine can never fit and I dont like the pressure of someone waiting on a chapter. I'm glad you liked it however and thanks for your review.
poor harry and Severus. i think they need eachother. great chapter. i cant wait for the next chapter. thanks for writing. :)
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