This is so excellent so far! Keep up the great work! You are doing an excellent job with Snape and Harry as characters - not rushing things but keeping us interested. I love it!
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! I appreciate the feedback, it's very encouraging.
I'm really enjoying this very distrustful, eager to be in control version of Harry. Severus is a lot more cannon, but with more humanity. I like all the little touches that make the characters seem more realistic-- Harry's hostile inner monologue, Severus avoiding Harry even though he should be seeing to his injuries, etc.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you like my characterizations. Your description of them was exactly what I was going for, so I guess I got it right :)
| Title: Part of the Plot
| 20 May 2014 12:58 am
|
| Reviewer: cinderella (Anonymous)
| [Report This]
|
Thanks för the update, great interaction between Snape and Harry, if anyone can handle Harry, it is Snape, very pshycological smart move to ask Harry assisting him to brew the potions, I feel that Harry is slowly starting to trust Snape.Looking forward to the next chapter!
| Title: Part of the Plot
| 19 May 2014 9:48 am
|
| Reviewer: Lauryn (Anonymous)
| [Report This]
|
One of the best, most realistic fanfics ever read. Thanks so much, please update :D
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I really appreciate that. Don't worry, there's an update soon to come.
| Title: Part of the Plot
| 19 May 2014 12:25 am
|
| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
| [Report This]
|
Thank you a tricky chapter but very well done! Would be great to get Severus take on the events!
| Title: Part of the Plot
| 19 May 2014 12:00 am
|
| Reviewer: Lea (Anonymous)
| [Report This]
|
Great development of the story.. and great way of gaining Harry's trust. For a moment I was afraid that Severus would force Harry into drinking the potion.
That's great that your characters are developing in so psychologically real way.
I like it very much.
looking forward to next chapters...
Really enjoying the story. Looking forward to the development of Harry and Shape's relationship.
| Title: Part of the Plot
| 18 May 2014 2:56 am
|
| Reviewer: Lili (Anonymous)
| [Report This]
|
Everything about this story is amazing. Great chapter!
| Title: Part of the Plot
| 17 May 2014 10:18 am
|
| Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous)
| [Report This]
|
Imagine my delight when i saw yet another update on this!! Great work, it gets better with every chapter. Your characterization of an abused/mistreated Harry is extremely well written! However, I'd like to offer some advice. :) Don't hesitate to draw out, and lenghthen the story's events or dialogue. And (as much as i hate to say this...) fill it up with lots and lots of details, then abruptly end with an evil (the other half of me is screaming noooo) cliffhanger. Just be sure to update often ;) keep up the amazing work, looking forward to occlumency and physics!
Author's Response: Thanks for your review! The advice is duly noted, though I may be inclined toward blaming my next cliffie on you, so I supposed it's a good thing you're anonymous ;)
|