| Title: Part of the Plot
| 19 May 2014 12:00 am
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| Reviewer: Lea (Anonymous)
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Great development of the story.. and great way of gaining Harry's trust. For a moment I was afraid that Severus would force Harry into drinking the potion.
That's great that your characters are developing in so psychologically real way.
I like it very much.
looking forward to next chapters...
Really enjoying the story. Looking forward to the development of Harry and Shape's relationship.
| Title: Part of the Plot
| 18 May 2014 2:56 am
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| Reviewer: Lili (Anonymous)
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Everything about this story is amazing. Great chapter!
| Title: Part of the Plot
| 17 May 2014 10:18 am
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| Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous)
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Imagine my delight when i saw yet another update on this!! Great work, it gets better with every chapter. Your characterization of an abused/mistreated Harry is extremely well written! However, I'd like to offer some advice. :) Don't hesitate to draw out, and lenghthen the story's events or dialogue. And (as much as i hate to say this...) fill it up with lots and lots of details, then abruptly end with an evil (the other half of me is screaming noooo) cliffhanger. Just be sure to update often ;) keep up the amazing work, looking forward to occlumency and physics!
Author's Response: Thanks for your review! The advice is duly noted, though I may be inclined toward blaming my next cliffie on you, so I supposed it's a good thing you're anonymous ;)
| Title: Part of the Plot
| 17 May 2014 4:58 am
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| Reviewer: Kendra Dhyanna (Anonymous)
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Fue un capítulo mu bonito, fascinante las estrtegias de severus para asegurarse que Harry realmente omara la poción,
y es linda la forma en la que el comienza a confiar poco a poco en la personalidad de Severus, si bien no entiende sus razones
en fin
maravilloso capítulo,
espero que puedas actualizar pronto
To be honest I don't blame Harry for being cautious of anything an adult does around him. He hasn't had an adult done anything "good" for him ever. I think Snape is taking an interesting approach to giving Harry his potions and also he is teaching Harry in a way. I hope the trust comes soon.
| Title: Part of the Plot
| 17 May 2014 4:20 am
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| Reviewer: severusphoenix (Anonymous)
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I'm greatly enjoying the story. Hope Harry learns to trust Snape at least a little before the summer ends. The potion making was fun.
awww I missed this update. Why must I go out of town... Anyways, I expected the yelling per say may not have wanted Harry to be yelled at out but usually adults yell then apologize for yelling. I wasn't expecting Harry getting hurt though that was a shocker. I don't blame Harry for being scared and not trusting. Dumbledore is in for a shock when he see Harry again. Harry will never trust ol' Dumbles again.
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! I actually posted this chapter while I was out of town myself, funnily enough. I'm glad you enjoyed, I had this scene planned for a while.
| Title: Part of the Plot
| 17 May 2014 2:55 am
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| Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous)
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I love your writing, and the plot is great. The story is going at a realistic pace, which I appreciate. What a great idea to have Harry brew/watch the brewing of his own potions. Great work! Can't wait for more.
Author's Response: Thank you! Yeah, I thought that having Harry brew was a very Snapish way of being nice.
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