hmm I wonder when Snape will realize that Harry isn't who he thinks he is. Also, that Harry has no idea what or who he is and that Magic is fairly new to him.
Hmm interesting. I personally would have bolted and not have gone with the crazy old man.
| Title: Good Instincts?
| 16 Apr 2014 12:51 am
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Liked your Severus definitely IC! I hope we see some more dialogue as we seem to have a lot of Harry's thoughts at the moment.
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| 16 Apr 2014 12:18 am
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Very powerful chapter thank you
| Title: Good Instincts?
| 15 Apr 2014 1:32 am
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| Reviewer: nandini (Anonymous)
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Wow, what a unique story line! Love the setting. Is this still Spinner's End?
| Title: Good Instincts?
| 14 Apr 2014 5:05 pm
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| Reviewer: jam (Anonymous)
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The story is promising and I've enjoyed reading it so far. But most importantly, to me, is the fact that it is so well written. Stories which are written so poorly that the reader has to constantly "translate" from what is written to what the author probably means, are not enjoyable to read because there is so much distraction from the story itself. Yours is not like that, and I congratulate you for it.
Author's Response: Thanks :) yeah, one of my pet peeves is poorly written stories. As I read very critically and notice every mistake, I do try to practice what I preach.
As Harry thought, this could work out well for him. A warm, clean bed, nice bathroom and plenty of food certainly sound better than he had been living. Of course knowing Snape it will all come with a side of snark but no worse than he got from the Dursleys.
Well, that was an interesting first chapter. Lots of questions raised there. I'm looking forward to the answers. I wonder how Harry and Snape will get along? Harry seems as reserved as Snape and maybe as cynical so it should be quite a meeting.
| Title: Good Instincts?
| 13 Apr 2014 5:21 am
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| Title: Good Instincts?
| 13 Apr 2014 3:08 am
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Excellent start, I hope uou'll update regularly.
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