I loved this story!!!! :) Will you please write a one-shot of Sirius and Molly finding out the truth? Pretty please with Christmas on top?
Wow... this story is beautifully written. It makes me want to cry but then everything is resolved and I can't stop smiling now. You portray Snape differently from your other stories and I'm glad he is not as cruel as usual. It's also unexpected to see that not only Severus but the other Slytherins too, care for Harry. Good job! I love the christmas room and how this story warm my heart.
I honestly think this chapter turned out perfectly. Maybe a few grammar errors that I missed, but then, if I missed them, probably everyone else did too. It didn't feel forced, nor did it feel lackluster. Honestly, it was about time Harry clipped them round the ears. Though you MIGHT want to fix the year issue, or at least explain it. After all, the Tournament was in his fourth year, DA in his fifth. I understand that this is AU, but without explanation on how you weaved the years together, it is confusing. Kudos, though, on a happy story and making that Snape had a heart without him being too soft.
Author's Response: Did I make a mistake? I know there was a moment when Harry was shouting at McGonagall about how people always turned against him, he was just listing times when people were being jerks though. I was trying to keep everything in order and stick to the timeline. I know Harry had mentioned about him 'being the boy who had brought Cedric's body back' and also about the one that lied about Voldemort. Those were both referring to how people felt about him in fifth year because of what the papers said.
What a great start to the Christmas Challenge. Lovely story. :)
Title: Santa's Offer
| 18 Dec 2015 5:52 am
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Reviewer: eh (Anonymous)
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I know you have this listed as complete, but it's really unsatisfactory that Harry doesn't confront Molly and ESPECIALLY Sirius. Their betrayal is far more significant here. I wish you'd add something for that.
Title: Santa's Offer
| 18 Dec 2015 5:35 am
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Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous)
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