This was a great chapter. I love seeing the progression of Harry’s life through these snapshots in time.
okay..... Many things left unsaid, many gaps, but looks good. You still had Severus kill Dumbledore? Guess that's okay? No, it's not, but we will have to see it.
| Title: Year 3-6
| 01 Apr 2016 7:42 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Thank you a very different and fascinating view of the action
Cute story.
Thank you very much
Woah!!!! Fantastic, dramatic ending to this chapter!
I really like this.
Looking forward to more.
| Title: Year 3-6
| 06 Mar 2016 9:17 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Very well done thank you!
Damn poor Sev. It must be hard to hear Harry say all of these things... Especially the last comment!
| Title: Year 3-6
| 05 Mar 2016 6:25 pm
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| Reviewer: Jenifer (Anonymous)
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Hi. Really like your story but it would work better in the past tense. Present tense makes for yucky reading. But your concept is good!
I'm glad seventh year will have its own chapter. There is a lot for Harry to do. And he will have to find out what Severus' role was and why he killed Dumbledore.
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