| Title: Serafima Snape, Potions Mistress
| 03 Oct 2016 1:14 pm
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| Reviewer: Kirinin (Signed)
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So interesting! Seraphima Snape may be my favorite kinda-OC in a long while. :D
-K
| Title: Serafima Snape, Potions Mistress
| 20 Sep 2016 5:33 pm
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| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed)
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I'm surprised at how much I like this. Harry and Snape's characters are spot on. I do like the personality conflicts and some of the gender changes that are going on. Well done!
I liked the name switch of Veronica from Ron, we get to keep thinking of him-her as Ron. Snape's name was great too, it's easy to tell who it is. I found that the sheer number of name changes are a little difficult to get through; I find myself thinking and trying to figure out who everyone is. I wish that some of the names were more obvious, even if it would make the names silly, such as Draconia instead of Draco. But maybe reading will get easier.
Continue on! If you have a plot planned I see this story going far!
Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for your comment!
THE NAMES, OMG, THE NAMES. I had Draco with a name that started with a "D" (not Draconia), but then I was getting confused with "Daisy," and I hate it when I read books and everyone's name starts with the same letter. I'm not stupid, but I do get easily confused. (Even when I'm reading fanfic, if the author uses the names "Severus" and "Sirius," man, I read those the same.) Anyway. To save myself, I changed the Dragon to a Cat, and ... screw it, says I. I've been trying to use first and last names a lot more than people would in normal conversation, just to keep reminding the reader. I see that I may not be doing that enough.
| Title: Serafima Snape, Potions Mistress
| 13 Sep 2016 4:51 pm
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| Reviewer: Twonky (Signed)
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This is a great idea and I think you've got a great start. It's interesting, because, if you continue, you'll probably move further and further from cannon. You've also got the mean girl thing just right.
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