Very interesting idea! Love it, and the title was a really cool idea too, dragged me in.
I am curious about the Dark Mark in the sky though, as far as I know, it was only ever cast into the sky by the Death Eaters after they had wrecked havoc. I think it is odd that Voldemort would shoot it into the sky, (which alerts people to the presence of him or his followers) and THEN go kill Lily and James, normally they would do it after. So, I think it is weird not only because he did it before, but because I feel like Voldemort wanting to kill them was a secret...he wouldn't want people to know that he set out to kill the Potter's because of a BABY, what a laughing stock he would be if his Death Eaters found out, 'You were worried about a baby? Dude.'
So, that's the only thing I have to wonder about. I'm looking forward to chapter two!
Author's Response: Eeek, thank you so much. That is very high praise, especially coming from such a talented writer as yourself! I LOVE your stories! I will attempt to have the last part uploaded within the next few weeks. In answer to your question about the Dark Mark, I hesitated putting it in because of the reasons you listed here. But, I was trying to remain true to kissyushka's original drawing, which is the inspiration for this ficlet, and can be found on DeviantArt. See Story Notes for more details! Again - much love and gratitude for your kind words! Means a lot!