I agree with other the other reviews. this is brilliantly written and imagined. Thank you for all the looking in a dictionary and translating latin. Yes, you really need a Beta; just to change the glaring tenses and half finished sentences, not your wonderful style. You have caught Luna in flights of fancy and Snape in wit. I wish you would give us more of the quotes from the H.B.Prince.
I felt sadness when he wept, in his recognising the son in the mother's sound. Dear Snape. Loved his swift defense of Harry in the class. and his attentiveness to his pupils.
I wish you hadn't burned the H.B. Prince's book from year six -
all those quotes gone up in smoke.
Reading on with pleasure.
Missing Alan Rickman so very much, yet glad I don't have to worry about how he would have dodged corona - he was in danger from it. Born on Febr. 21. 1946.
Ever remembered with fondness.
Author's Response: Thank you for your wonderful review. I have a beta (thanks to the lovely people in this site), and from now on I hope that I'll manage to exceed the limit that my grammar mistakes placed before me :P.
You certainly will receive more quotes of HBP. I'm planning to merge them in the plot, but I think I'll even post another fic which is dedicated just for them, perhaps including Severus & Lily flashbacks.
Alan Rickman was a good man, but at least we can take comfort that he doesn't need to fight CoViD. There are worst fates than death.
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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I love your Severus he is amazing thank you
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Thank you a great chapter
Thank you for this story! I can’t wait for the next installment :)
Author's Response: Stay tuned!
Hey! Just wanted to leave a shout out for you :)
I really liked how you wrote Severus’ dream in the beginning of this chapter. It felt like it was a believable dream, and I don’t find many people who can write dream scene that I finish thinking, “yah, that was a dream.”
Anyway, love the story so far! It’s fun to see Snape siding with the students against a common enemy.
I like the Jonathon Prince persona.
Author's Response: Sometimes I wonder whether the fanfic will be better without it. Glad to hear that :)
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