This is different from any other story I’ve read in a long time, and I appreciate your creativity.
I like your writing style and enjoy reading your descriptions. Your story sounds interesting too. However, I find it confusing - I'm not sure why or how Harry is Merlin's heir and what the deal is with he and Voldemort being alive again.
I have a couple suggestions which might help:
1. Plan out the plotline and chapters of your story and identify any gaps.
2. Ask someone to proof-read your chapters before you post them. Even if they aren't professionals, they should be able to identify where things do and don't make sense.
I hope this helped, and I wish you all the best!
~HermioneGirl~
| Title: Chapter 4: Meeting
| 11 Apr 2021 8:07 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Thank you I’ll enjoy reading more of this story
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