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Reviews For Harry Potter and the Slytherin Conundrum
Great development of plot and pace. The only thing I noticed that needs clarification is one more line mentioning Harry made it to the bathroom on the train to change. It was very brief. “Have to use the loo, so I’ll just change there,” he replied as he slid the door closed behind him, not giving them a chance to question his actions. Harry kept his head down as he made his way back to their carriage... It seems like it could use an "After changing in the loo, Harry kept his head down..." Other than that it was a fantastic chapter. I wouldn't mind Draco and Harry getting together. And I like that Charlie, Sirius, and Remus are out and in relationships. |
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