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Reviews by Foolish Wishmaker
After a bout of accidental magic and a rescue in the summer before his third year, Harry begins to develop an unlikely relationship with one Severus T. Snape.
Takes Place: 4th summer - Snape flavour: None Tags: None Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape, Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape
Rated: T
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys
Chapters: 1 - Completed: No - Updated: 29 Mar 2008 / 29 Mar 2008 Series: None - Challenges: None
The first few paragraphs really drew me in. I love the set-up. The words you chose made it so easy to visualize, and you did a nice job of letting the reader draw some conclusions. Some great lines in here (the mention of Fluffy made me crack up). The whole thing with the Dursleys was hilarious. I liked how you changed things, and yet kept a lot the same, like Harry grabbing his stuff and getting out of there... ... only to run into Snape. Perfectly evil cliff-hanger. :-D Author's Response: Yeah there's more - like another 9 chapters or something (hopefully soon to be 10 chapters) but yeah you don't need to go running off to find it on FF.net - it'll all be up here eventually. But probably in like weekly blocks because I'm lazy and have limited internet action XD Thanks for the review - I wanted to make sure that a lot of the story was sort of the same yet different because I think it's easier when there is a little bit different with each chapter from the original book, because then it all adds up to be completely different but it's sort of believable. I hope that made sense (I have a bad habit of sprouting out total crap) but yeah C: Harry has come into his inheritance. It is not all that he has hoped for.
Takes Place: 7th summer - Snape flavour: None Tags: Adoption, Alternate Universe, Child fic, Creature!fic, Deaging, Snape-meets-Dursleys Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape, Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape
Rated: T
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Neglect, Profanity, Violence
Chapters: 21 - Completed: No - Updated: 12 Nov 2008 / 01 Apr 2008 Series: None - Challenges: None
A fun read... I can't wait to see where it goes. Incredible how Harry's capable of writing such a calm note instead of screaming like a banshee all the way to Hogwarts and kicking down Dumbledore's door. :-D Harry has finally had enough of his relatives' abuse and has locked himself in the chamber of secrets. To keep up appearances, Snape has been sent to take Harry's place for the summer.
Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None Tags: Alternate Universe, Snape-meets-Dursleys Categories: Snape Equal Status to Harry > Comrades Snape and Harry
Rated: T
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Alcohol Use, Physical Punishment Spanking, Profanity, Violence
Chapters: 7 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 20 May 2008 / 13 Apr 2008 Series: None - Challenges: Wake up Call
Great chapter. Author's Response: nope. i did that because Snape is needed else where. His spying skills were still needed! There are many forms of vengeance. It can be just as satisfying to return cruelty with kindness as to return cruelty with equal cruelty...and sometimes it can be more dangerous and more insidious to do so. Faced with an eleven-year-old Harry Potter, Severus Snape has a decision to make: How does he like his vengeance?
Takes Place: 1st Year - Snape flavour: None Tags: Adoption, Alternate Universe, Slytherin!Harry, Snape-meets-Dursleys Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Rated: T
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Neglect
Chapters: 3 - Completed: No - Updated: 24 Nov 2008 / 05 May 2008 Series: None - Challenges: None
And... wow, Snape smiling warmly must be a thing of horror. :-) When Harry wakes one morning, he discovers a badly injured Snape in his living room, and tries to hide him. But Petunia discovers them and reveals a secret she has kept for thirteen years--one that will change the course of Harry's life forever, and Severus's as well. AU, pre-GOF.
Takes Place: 4th summer - Snape flavour: None Tags: Alternate Universe, Kidnapped, Snape-meets-Dursleys Categories: Parental Snape > Biological Father Snape
Rated: T
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Alcohol Use, Character Death, Physical Punishment Spanking, Profanity, Violence
Chapters: 35 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 19 Aug 2008 / 15 May 2008 Series: Prince Manor - Challenges: None
Excellent start! I don't have time this morning to read the next chapter, but you've definitely hooked me. Poor Snape... but hey, he's out of Voldie's circle now, and that's a good thing. Harry has rotten luck. What's he going to do now?! Author's Response: I never knew about that challenge, I was just working off of what DaughterofAres gave me. And Harry really does have the worst luck, but it might chnage.
"WHAT DO YOU MEAN SNAPE IS YOUR FATHER? MERLIN'S BLOODY ARSE!" Best. Line. EVER. :-D I think your Harry is just right. I mean, this is soon after he practically throws himself at Sirius, whom he'd just met and knew nothing about, so it makes sense that he'd be accepting when someone he disliked turned out to be his father. Both, after all, offered to take him from the Dursleys. I think that's the way to Harry's heart. LOL This is turning into a really great story. Author's Response: When I wrote that line, I could just picture Ron screaming that as he was reading Harry's letter. LOL. I'm glad you like my portrayal of Harry here, I was a bit worried that maybe their relationship was progressing too fast, but it's not like he's jumping into Snapes arms and crying "Oh Daddy! I finally have a father! It's what I always dreamed of!" kind of thing. Harry is still unsure of Severus and hesitant at this stage and Sev is still trying to come to grips with the fact that now he's the parent of . . .Merlin help him . . .Harry Potter! Arggh! But he's trying and somehow they will eventually work everything out, because I am a firm believer in happy endings. Always. Snape is left dying in the Shrieking Shack after giving Harry his memories convinced that Harry is going to his death. When Snape dies, he is given a chance to send his soul backwards in time seven years to give Harry a chance for a better (and hopefully longer) life. Will switch back and fourth between being Snape centered and Harry centered.
Takes Place: None - Snape flavour: None Tags: Alternate Universe, Slytherin!Harry, Snape-meets-Dursleys Categories: Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape
Rated: K+
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Neglect
Chapters: 12 - Completed: No - Updated: 05 Jun 2009 / 17 May 2008 Series: None - Challenges: None
It really pulled me in as a reader and makes me want to see what happens next. Especially with poor unsuspecting Harry who is about to get a whole lot more Snape in his life. LOL Constructive criticism: So far everyone seems to be mostly in character, although Snape's reaction to being dumped into the past with a mission to change the future seems... nonexistent. We really don't get any sense of how he feels. Part of that is because you are using too much passive voice instead of active, which means you are telling us and not showing us what happens. Show us how Snape feels, don't just tell us what he's doing. It will make the story flow much better and make Snape's actions more meaningful. At least in this chapter, there is not a lot of conflict. Again, I think this has to do with not knowing how Snape feels... he seems to just go along with everything, with no thoughts or feelings of his own. He got dumped into the past and he is just going on with his life like absolutely nothing happened. I think some emotional conflict would help... there seems to be no REAL conflict -- Dumbledore doesn't refuse to let Snape get Harry, for example -- but you can still inject some conflict within Snape himself. As far as the presentation of the story... I think you need to split up some of those large paragraphs. Long paragraphs tend to be dreary and readers start skipping ahead, not actually reading everything. Lastly, this DESPERATELY needs a beta, or at least you need to look over it and pay very careful attention to homophones, tense, contractions, omitted words, and run-on sentences. I think you have a great start here, so hopefully you can find a beta and... continue! :-) Severus Snape, high ranking Death Eater and Headmaster of Hogwarts, finds out that his son is not his own when the boy's glamour begins to break. Entry in the 2009 Challenge Fest. In Response to the Cruel Reversal Challenge by FoolishWishmaker.
Takes Place: 6th Year - Snape flavour: None Tags: Alternate Universe Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Rated: K
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Warnings: Profanity, Violence
Chapters: 1 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 07 May 2009 / 07 May 2009 Series: Good People and Death Eaters - Challenges: Cruel Reversal
Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad you like it! I wanted to give hints of the world around a primarily family based story. The rest of the stories I'm writing in this universe (except "Spectacles", which is background) are about what happens in the family dynamic when this rather twisted world's equalibrium is disturbed. Dudley and Harry flee Vernon - to Severus. A different Tom Riddle, Petunia is good. Lucius and Draco are helpful. Albus is a bit misguided. The twins are only a year older than Harry, so I can make them non-Gryffindor.
Takes Place: 1st summer before Hogwarts, 1st Year - Snape flavour: None Tags: Alternate Universe, Slytherin!Harry Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Rated: T
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Profanity
Chapters: 137 - Completed: No - Updated: 28 Sep 2014 / 28 Jun 2009 Series: None - Challenges: None
Author's Response: Glad you enjoyed it! I never liked Rita Skeeter. My muses surprised me completely, when they brought me a fluffy bunny story, where Skeeter is a hero (kind of). Oneshot. Rated for some swearing. Post OotP.
Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None Tags: None Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Rated: T
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Warnings: Profanity
Chapters: 1 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 13 Jul 2009 / 13 Jul 2009 Series: None - Challenges: None
Author's Response: Thank you very much! Btw. I love your ID/nickname :-) |
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