Slytherin!
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When Harry runs away from the Dursleys at the start of 3rd year, he is captured by Death Eaters and nearly killed, resulting in the loss of his magic. Only one man can help him now, Severus Snape, who has just discovered a shocking revelation . . . Harry is his son! Follow Harry and Severus as they attempt to build a relationship, resolve past conflicts, and heal Harry from the trauma he has endured.
Takes Place: 3rd summer
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Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe, Runaway
Categories: Parental Snape > Biological Father Snape
Membership status: Member
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Reviews by DaughterOfAres
Rated: T
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Warnings: Alcohol Use, Profanity, Torture, Violence
Chapters: 22 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 26 Mar 2008 / 29 Feb 2008
Series: Hidden Away - Challenges: None
Chapters: 22 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 26 Mar 2008 / 29 Feb 2008
Series: Hidden Away - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 22: Always A Snape | 26 Mar 2008 |
| Reviewer: DaughterOfAres (Signed) |
- Good ending!
For a sequel I want Devon to do something really stupid (like hit Mia or Melody)) and Sev have to go kick his ass to hell and back.
That said its been fun and I can't wait for the next!
Author's Response: All right, I'm willing to put that in for you...now I need to think about where it's going to go . . .and thanks for all the reviews and if you want check out my other two stories here. I should have the first chapter of the sequel posted by tomorrow . . .maybe I'll do a series. . .
What if Harry had apparated himself somewhere in the wizarding world when he ended up on the school roof? What if he had been found by Snape? How does Harry know where Snape lives?
Takes Place: 0 - Pre Hogwarts (before Harry is 11) - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Adoption, Alternate Universe, Child fic, Slytherin!Harry, Snape-meets-Dursleys, SuperPower! Harry
Categories: Master Snape > Apprentice Harry, Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Takes Place: 0 - Pre Hogwarts (before Harry is 11) - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Adoption, Alternate Universe, Child fic, Slytherin!Harry, Snape-meets-Dursleys, SuperPower! Harry
Categories: Master Snape > Apprentice Harry, Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Rated: K
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Physical Punishment Spanking
Chapters: 1 - Completed: No - Updated: 06 Mar 2008 / 06 Mar 2008
Series: None - Challenges: None
Chapters: 1 - Completed: No - Updated: 06 Mar 2008 / 06 Mar 2008
Series: None - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 | 23 Mar 2008 |
| Reviewer: DaughterOfAres (Signed) |
- I just found this story and think you have a good start and I hope you update soon.
There are a few things you could do to improve the story however. For starters you need more detail in each scene. You could have easily turned this chapter into three or four with more details. For example don't say 'they went to the store and...' try describing the store a bit and the character's reactions. When you're writing its easy to see what you're talking about because you're the one writing it. You're readers have no idea so you have to create the scene for them. Remember: Show don't tell.
Also, I like stories have a 'realistic' level of CP, but there's something off about it in this story. Try expanding the scenes after Snape is through punishing Harry. For example instead of "snape held him..." try describing how he held him, what were his hands doing, what did Harry look like, what was the body language. You have a tendency to put an entire scene in one paragraph.
Also, we need to know more about their feelings. A fact that could easily be fixed with more details.
The best suggestion: get a beta. Beta's will help to let you know when you need more details and when you need less. A beta can check for a number of things that are easily overlooked by the writer. Once you find a beta take half of this chapter and try rewriting it with more details. You'll be amazed at the results.
Overall, this is a really good start and you're a good writer. With a little work this story could be one of the best.
Please update soon.
Au: Second Year. A little bit of healthy snooping reveals some old documents that will have Harry's life quickly spiralling out of control and have him questioning: Who Am I?
Takes Place: 2nd Year - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Adoption
Categories: Parental Snape > Biological Father Snape
Takes Place: 2nd Year - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Adoption
Categories: Parental Snape > Biological Father Snape
Rated: T
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Physical Punishment Spanking, Violence
Chapters: 8 - Completed: No - Updated: 05 Jul 2008 / 24 Mar 2008
Series: None - Challenges: None
Chapters: 8 - Completed: No - Updated: 05 Jul 2008 / 24 Mar 2008
Series: None - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 1: I'm Curious... Just Curious | 31 Mar 2008 |
| Reviewer: DaughterOfAres (Signed) |
- Really, interesting so far.
You have a great start here and I can't wait for you to post more.
Author's Response: I have another chapter in validation at the moment... I hope. So should be up soon. :)
Sequel to Hide Yourself Away! Please read or skim that first before you read this one, or else you’ll be quite lost.
Harry and Severus return to Hogwarts to finish out the third year, and encounter more problems, in the form of an escaped convict and a meddlesome Headmaster, but are aided by new and old friends to discover a truth that was hidden away.
Takes Place: 4th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe, Azkaban Character
Categories: Parental Snape > Biological Father Snape
Harry and Severus return to Hogwarts to finish out the third year, and encounter more problems, in the form of an escaped convict and a meddlesome Headmaster, but are aided by new and old friends to discover a truth that was hidden away.
Takes Place: 4th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe, Azkaban Character
Categories: Parental Snape > Biological Father Snape
Rated: T
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Warnings: Physical Punishment Spanking, Profanity, Violence
Chapters: 26 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 19 Apr 2008 / 27 Mar 2008
Series: Hidden Away - Challenges: None
Chapters: 26 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 19 Apr 2008 / 27 Mar 2008
Series: Hidden Away - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 1: A Sorting and An Apology | 27 Mar 2008 |
| Reviewer: DaughterOfAres (Signed) |
- LOL. I can't stop laughing at Trelawney fainting.
Great begining and I can't wait for more.
Author's Response: Yeah, I had to put that in there, I couldn't resist! LOL! Couldn't you just see it, though? It's a typical Trelawney behavior. You'll be seeing more of our batty Seer in future chapters. :) I'll try and update soon!
| Title: Chapter 12: Unexpected Gifts | 08 Apr 2008 |
| Reviewer: DaughterOfAres (Signed) |
- *sigh* love the twins. I'm still waiting for the scene where Snape has to beat the sh*t out of Devon. *grins evily*
I really do hope you respond to my Tobias Snape challenge. He really is a fun character to play with.
Author's Response: You're going to get it, don't worry. It's coming up in . . .4 chapters. And once i finish this, I'll be happy to write about Tobias.
| Title: Chapter 13: End Game | 09 Apr 2008 |
| Reviewer: DaughterOfAres (Signed) |
- Great chapter, I see a future scene with Devon. *grins* I can't wait and I love Harry's ideas and Sev's reaction to them.
Author's Response: It's coming, in chapter 16. Actually some of it begins in the end of chapter 15, but well, you'll see and Harry's ideas were pretty funny at least I thought so!
| Title: Chapter 15: Permission Denied | 10 Apr 2008 |
| Reviewer: DaughterOfAres (Signed) |
- *squeel* I can't wait for the next chapter! I have to know what Sev does to Devon. I think he should castrate him. Or use one or more of Harry's suggestions.
Also, is Harry going to try to sneak into hogsmead since his dad's gone? That would be something Harry would do. And I would love to see Sev's reaction to that.
Please update soon. I can't wait till the next chapter. Be creative with Devon!
Author's Response: I agree! As for what harry does when Sev's gone . . .well, you know the old saying, when the cat's away, the mice will play? You'll see what happens to Devon tomorrow, I'll post it as soon as I'm done with it, like maybe tomorrow morning!
| Title: Chapter 16: Family Matters | 11 Apr 2008 |
| Reviewer: DaughterOfAres (Signed) |
- *squeel* Sev is awesome! I loved it! It was well worth the wait. There are no words to describe my utter near orgasmic joy as Sev beat the shit out of him and shrunk his family jewels. It was wonderful.
I can't wait to find out what Harry did.
Amazing chapter. It was everything I hoped for and more!
Author's Response: Yay! I'm so glad you liked it! I had a very good time writing it--I love to give the nasty characters the fate they deserve *chuckles malevolently!*
| Title: Chapter 17: Forbidden Territory | 12 Apr 2008 |
| Reviewer: DaughterOfAres (Signed) |
- AHH!!! I was so hoping Snape would find out about Harry in the chapter. *sigh* guess I have to wait for the next one.
Good chapter and please update soon.
Author's Response: Yes well, I had to give Harry some time to get himself in trouble, you know!
| Title: Chapter 19: An Unfortunate Discovery | 13 Apr 2008 |
| Reviewer: DaughterOfAres (Signed) |
- Great chapter!
Author's Response: Thanks and I'll be posting a new one shortly!