Unsorted!
When Harry finds an injured Snape on his doorstep and must hide him from the Dursleys, he has no idea that this very, very bad day will be the start of something good.
Harry and Snape are thrown together by annoying relatives, a series of strange dreams, and Voldemort's latest hunt for Harry, but their greatest challenge may well be surviving each other. This will be a long summer unless the two can find a way to work together. A slow-burn enemy-to-mentor story.
Alternate 6th summer (and part of the school year): post-OotP; ignores HBP and DH.
Takes Place: 6th summer
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Snape flavour: Canon Snape
Tags: Injured!Harry, Injured!Snape, Snape-meets-Dursleys
Categories: Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape
Membership status: Member
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Reviews by elocution
Rated: T
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Neglect, Violence
Chapters: 61 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 08 Mar 2021 / 30 Apr 2007
Series: None - Challenges: Battered Snape for Breakfast
Chapters: 61 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 08 Mar 2021 / 30 Apr 2007
Series: None - Challenges: Battered Snape for Breakfast
| Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16 - Visions of Sugar Plums | 27 Aug 2007 |
| Reviewer: elocution (Signed) |
- O_o...
i soo was not expecting that ending! i remembered the line from the dream, vaguely (i, being a very rabid reader, jumped in the chapter without brushing up on the dreams), but...O_o
i should be working on my six or so projects (yes, and we've only had ONE week of school!) but you have sufficiently distracted me. feel proud! very proud!
here, have some imaginary caramel!
anyway, i liked snape's, "Why, Potter. You do dream of me, then? How…touching.”
*snickers*
i would write more, but i really really need to work on my six projects now. i'm sorry! but, before i leave, let me get this out there...if harry does not tell snape immediately about the whole snitch being true thing, i will yell at him.
and if snape does not believe him, the sentiment will be turned to him.
cheerios, and toodleoo! wish me luck with the attack of the rampaging paper cuts!
Author's Response:
:) Yes, the dreams are fresh in my mind because I wrote them, so I had to remember that not everyone else will remember them as well. I hope it wasn't confusing!
Oh, I am sooo proud to have distracted you! Yay! My mission is accomplished!
Ooh, I'll do my best to spare them both from their yelling, but seeing as how they're both such prideful, stubborn individuals, I can't guarantee you won't EVER want to beat them over the head, understand...
Thanks for reviewing again! Oh, and good luck with the attack of the rampaging paper cuts!
| Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17 - The Second Prophecy | 04 Sep 2007 |
| Reviewer: elocution (Signed) |
- mmm...*munches some cheerios*
yes, i take "food for thought" rather literally. so sue me. *smirks*
fascinating chapter! at the end, i swear you sounded like one of those little announcer things at the end of a tv episode, asking a bunch of questions and dun-dun-dunning and the oh-so classic stay tuned at the end! XD
any suspicions i had about harry's so-called inner eye were only heightened by this chapter...not sure if it's just paranoia, or whether i'm justified! everything's just a bit too...clean, maybe? hmmm...and the way he remembers stuff after they exist...tampering with memory, or something?
okay, i just reread half your chapter looking for that line that made me wonder...found it!
It was like…maybe a part of himself has been holding the memories for him, so he’d be able to recall them.
so suspicious....
anyway, i guess i'm just a paronoid belle at the moment, but these new developments are fascinating!
loved the chapter!
Author's Response:
Yay! *munches on yummy reviews* I LOVE long reviews, and I've received so many this chapter, I'm simply thrilled! :) Yours being the first, of course!
I'm glad you heard my announcer voice...I practice nightly. And I certainly hope I'm not to blame if you leap into paranoia...I don't want the horrible responsibility of having destroyed your sanity or something. Eek! I'm curious what you mean by 'clean,' though...
Thanks for the review, belle!
It's a One Shot that takes Harry and Snape's first Occlumency lesson in another direction.
Takes Place: None - Snape flavour: None
Tags: None
Categories: Teacher Snape > Professor Snape, Snape Equal Status to Harry > Foes Snape and Harry
Takes Place: None - Snape flavour: None
Tags: None
Categories: Teacher Snape > Professor Snape, Snape Equal Status to Harry > Foes Snape and Harry
Rated: K+
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys
Chapters: 1 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 27 Jun 2007 / 27 Jun 2007
Series: None - Challenges: None
Chapters: 1 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 27 Jun 2007 / 27 Jun 2007
Series: None - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 1: As Long As You Know That, Potter. | 27 Aug 2007 |
| Reviewer: elocution (Signed) |
- That. was. bloody. brilliant.
After Snape's visit to Surrey, Harry writes a thank-you letter that triggers an extended correspondence and a tentative friendship between the two of them.
Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: None
Categories: Healer Snape, Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape, Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Rated: T
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Age Difference Romance, Profanity, Romance/Het
Chapters: 17 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 02 Sep 2009 / 25 Aug 2007
Series: Chivalry - Challenges: None
Chapters: 17 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 02 Sep 2009 / 25 Aug 2007
Series: Chivalry - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 2: Felicitations | 26 Aug 2007 |
| Reviewer: elocution (Signed) |
- *chokes*
i! love! your! snape!
seriously..."you do realize that my birthday is not until january?!" and...
"he squirmed like a toad in the early stages of vivisection"?!
and of course, the oh so subtle -H- in the beginning of the letter...*grins*...oh, the warm and fuzziness...
i'm really excited about the class on friday...and, a letter from the Dursley King? this shall be fun...
| Title: Chapter 3: We Tender Our Sincere Regrets | 27 Aug 2007 |
| Reviewer: elocution (Signed) |
- My pained screams are your bread and butter?!?!?!?
think about it! if you make me delighted and warm and fuzzy with a new updateyio...you'll even get TOAST! mind you, if you like toast, because i personally detest the stuff...
*big puppy dog eyes*
how about...strawberries?!?!?!
yes, i do realize i'm attempting to bribe you with imaginary food. i am -such- an idiot...
anyways, brilliant chappie, brilliant cliffie, and you are very evil.
hmmph.
oh, and i send harry a hug. dunno if he'll get it in a chappie, but make sure you at least give him one backstage from me, okay?
hmmmm...my favorite line?
by far...
"Did the thing with the gold work for you?" Harry asks, hearing his own cold, trembling voice as though from a long way away. "Or are your hands still covered in it?"
and...right after that, when my heart just broke...bittersweet moments do that, you know?
Instinct takes over; he rears back, throwing up a hand to shield his face from the blow he is sure is coming.
But Snape's eyes, which have not looked away from his, alter in their expression so suddenly that it is like seeing another person emerge behind them. Harry cannot identify the look he sees there; it has come and gone in an instant, but it is sufficient to make Harry lower the arm with which he is shielding himself.
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here, harry. have a hug.
*sobs*
Author's Response:
I do love a long review more than anything. :-) I promise I will update again soon. I doubt I'll be posting two updates within 12 hours of each other anymore like I did this weekend, but it won't be long, I swear. And in the mean time I am exceedingly fond of English Toasting Bread with Kerrygold butter. :-)
And I am glad that you picked up on the significance of that moment between Snape and Harry---it is a very important interaction, despite being so tiny, as will become clear in the next chapter.
| Title: Chapter 4: In Care Of, Part One | 30 Aug 2007 |
| Reviewer: elocution (Signed) |
- Good day, Professor Snape.
For the first time in several reviews, I have finally decided to display my ability of using a reasonable modicum of grammar. Feel grateful, because I doubt anybody else would merit such an honor other than you, Sir. There also is the rather selfish influencing factor that I'm a bit terrified you might rip me apart and feed me to Hagrid's Beast-of-the-Day if I don't.
Rational fear, no?
Anyway, I am currently in the state of mindless procrastination from all things that I should be doing right now but am not. You make a rather welcome distraction, Professor, especially in enormous, mind-boggling chapters like this one. Loved it!
You know, you do make a delightfully angsty little fellow, what with your endless sighing, trying to be polite (and failing dismally, though that makes it ten times better), and that eyebrow thing. I've tried it in the mirror dozens of times, but I think my eyebrows are forever doomed to live in harmony and on the same horizontal line. Bleh.
Your response to Harry's ridiculous delusions that he made some sort of inconvenience was stunning, Sir. Full marks, and all that jazz, and possibly my favorite heart-wrenching, Harry-needs-a-hug moment of the day.
Cheers,
Grumpy
PS: Irony fully intended in signature. I blame the nickname on a certain friend who insists on the existence of a certain "Lumpy the elephant," and the necessity of rhyming nicknames for any unfortunate soul she comes in contact with.
PPS: I send my regards and a heaping serving of English Toasting Bread with Kerrygold butter to that oh-so delightful author who has an odd penchant to leave charmed pictures of topless Narcissa Malfoys lying around.
PPPS: PS's are marvelous things. At the moment, I'm merely trying to annoy you with them, and I assure you, it is quite fun. You make for brilliant entertainment, Sir.
PPPPS: By the way, you used one of my grade's vocabulary words...laggard. Said word brings up feelings of much misery, seeing as I endured a cassette reading of said vocabulary words in a monotone voice this morning, and it was definitely not fun.
PPPPPS: Happy La Tomatina Day! Spanish thing! No, I'm not Spanish, but I learned about it today and found it absolutely brilliant. Go look it up! Go on!
PPPPPP: At the moment, I'm trying to write one of the longest reviews your jailer has ever received. You may, perhaps, recognize these efforts as such?
PPPPPPPS: ZOMG POST MORE PLZ!!!!111111111111
Author's Response:
Madam: The name you claim for yourself is rather misleading. "Elocution" does not suit you quite so well as, for example, "verbosity". The ability to consistently put one word in front of another does not a skilled communicator make; you would seem to overwhlem by volume, rather than rhetoric. Still, the incorrigible creature who has made an amanuensis out of me seems to have derived some pleasure in your missive, and therefore, no doubt, you have achieved your purpose. Regards, S. Snape
P.S. The delicate art of arching a single eyebrow is a skill learned over time with much practice. However, I believe genetics also plays a role; like Hapsburg lips and widow's peaks and detached earlobes, not everyone is capable of such a refined form of expression.
| Title: Chapter 5: In Care Of, Part Two | 31 Aug 2007 |
| Reviewer: elocution (Signed) |
- oh fascinating, i get to meet Harry?! sorry i can't offer you the same punctuation-ness that i gave good ol' Snape over there, but what can I say? i'm lazy. dead lazy. and exhausted beyond belief, on account of the fact i have a horrible cold and am sneezy and stuffed with snot and feel bleh.
ugh.
anyways, i can definitely sympathize with how hard this chapter must have been to write! poor author-y. poor harry. poor snape-y...nah, pretend i never said that. he might just decide to use me as his battering as he takes over the dursley residence, and that would NOT be good.
luna?! yay! luna! hehe, she should be fun to mess with snape's head. honestly, she can mess with anyone's head with some of those totally random comments that she makes! she's one of those people i -really- wish i could meet.
hmmm..favorite lines for you to gobble up? definitely, this one made my eyes teary. then again, my eyes are always teary because of this stupid darn cold! gah!
"Aunt Petunia?" the boy says again, in the small voice of a small child. Something about the plaintive, hopeless note behind the words causes Snape to gather his hand into a fist.
Snape takes the plate with the sandwich in one hand and the glass of water in the other, but just as he has just taken a step towards the parlor, Potter's next words freeze him in his tracks.
"Mum?"
A long silence follows, into which the boy expels a long, shaky, broken breath, not unlike a very quiet sob.
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and then...harry got that hug i've been pining for. here, harry, i'll send you some more cyber-hugs too, and offer a customary load of english toasting bread with kerrygold butter for our beloved author! and for snape...perhaps, licorice? that stuff rocks all.
Author's Response:
Dear Elocution, sorry you're sick! Did you say something about Snape going back to the Dursleys? Why would he do that? Oh, no....come to think of it, that letter I got from Uncle Vernon is missing, I just thought I'd dropped it. He's not going to do something mad, is he? Is he?
...Could I watch?
Sincerely, Harry Potter
| Title: Chapter 6: To Whom It May Concern | 02 Sep 2007 |
| Reviewer: elocution (Signed) |
- i agree with jade...i read each chapter slowly and pore over every detail to make it last longer! i do that with dark chocolate, too, and sometimes watermelon...feel very flattered...XD
i have to tell you what strikes me in each chapter, so here goes!
"Harry knows about that," she adds casually, filling the bowl with sugar. "How you helped me, I mean. I expect that's why he dreamed I was your daughter. Harry's never had a father, and I think he thinks that fathers always make things safe. They don't, of course, but Harry's dreams aren't really very subtle."
it's very...insightful, i suppose? 'twas brilliant, luna. really. and i can picture you casually remarking that...you'd make a wonderful heroine in some romantic novel, you know, set out in the country with a basket of eggs and the dreams in your eyes...though i have no clue what your perfect match would be like!
out of pure curiosity, because that quote set me out to thinking (surprise surprise...i can -think-!), i have a question for the author. do you think of luna's actress in the movies when you write? like to get a visual image? or do you have your own? because when i read that, i could picture the actress's voice and actions and it really did fit the scene...
it does annoy me how unappreciated luna is, both in fans and in the books. i swear, i was sitting in the theater for the fifth movie with my brother, and some little boy imitated luna's voice and words in the middle of the movie and -snickered-.
that boy was lucky he was out of my line of vision, or else he would have experienced the oh-so frightening grumpy glare....
Author's Response:
Why thank you! I think I would very much enjoy walking through the country with a basket of eggs. I'm not sure how to put the dreams in my eyes, though, is there a Charm for that? Love, Luna
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Dear elocution: In response to your question, I've been writing Luna for a long time---I have a novel length Snape/Luna story that I started writing right after OOTP came out, well before the movie. The result is that for years I've had a certain picture of Luna in my head that can't be dispelled by the actor----but then, that's true for essentially every character in the books. However, I adore Evanna Lynch to teeny tiny bits, and when I want to be sure a line is right for Luna, I try to hear Evanna saying it, and that usually works. :-) --Branwyn
| Title: Chapter 7: For Your Immediate Attention | 05 Sep 2007 |
| Reviewer: elocution (Signed) |
- I swear, you have turned me into some little addict of anything-that-comes-out-of-Branwyn's-brain,-pen,-or-computer.
It's a bit frightening, because as much as I've been obsessed with fanfiction, only a few make me literally squeal when I see an update. And with your amazingly long and fantastically often ones, one might come to the conclusion that I've become a ditzy fangirl.
Scary. o_O
Here, have some food.
(As you can see, I have given up on specifying a food, in case you end up detesting it or something and hating me for the rest of my life. So yeah. Take the food, woman! ^_^)
I could follow this with a lengthy declaration on the perfections of Branwyn and her sleep-deprived muses, but I will be a bit more succinct, unfortunately. This is only because I too require that pesky little thing called sleep at the moment, seeing as I spent half last night gobbling up fanfiction like some maniac little munchkin person.
Allow me to say this much, however...your writing style is brilliant. Pure brilliance. You write prose like a poet, and that's the highest praise I can dole out.
That last scene, I think, really cinched it. You gave me, you know, that sore feeling in the stomach where you're just aching and pining and you're like, they're fictional characters, girl, get a grip, but you can't, and it's just...
I suppose you have billions of adoring fans by now, and you'll just be like, there goes that annoying elocution person who never shuts up, but seriously. You. are. amazing.
Okay, I'll shake off that little bubble of amazement currently choking me, or try to, anyway. Wish me luck! XD
What fanfics would you recommend? Or novels, really, or anything at all, because I'll probably trail out off of anything that you said you liked like some obsessed fool? I realize this is really random, and you may have already been asked this before, but I'm on this mission to find good stuff to read.
Cheers!
Author's Response:
I have a number of vacancies for resident Branwyn Fangirls so feel free to fangirl away! :-D
Food is good. I'm rather hungry at the moment.
And I am pleased you think my prose is poetic, since poetry is the primary non-ficcish arena in which I work.
I do know the feeling you describe---the "they're just fictional characters" mantra you sometimes have to repeat to yourself---but this is probably the first time I've elicited those feelings in anybody with my own work. I am usually the victim of such a feeling, not the perpetrator. :-)
I most certainly do not have billions of adoring fans. What I have is a lovely little core of people on this website who give me long, gorgeous, detailed reviews every chapter, and you are among them, and I always look forward to your reviews---they are one of the chief reasons I have been moved to work so steadily on this story and update so often.
I don't know if you know that I've written a lot of fic that's not posted here? If you're interested, just follow the links in my profile. As to other people's fic...my best friend Liz (lizbee on LJ) wrote a novel length story a couple of years ago called Girl Most Likely that you might enjoy. go to lizbee.livejournal.com and look in the sidebar for the link to HP fic. In the way of novels...well, I was a lit major so there's an endless stream of them, but try Dorothy Sayers, Laurie R King, and Lois McMaster Bujold if you haven't read them already. :-)
| Title: Chapter 8: Handle With Care | 09 Sep 2007 |
| Reviewer: elocution (Signed) |
- Harry!
*bleepittybleepittybleepdadeep*
you moron! you dunderhead! you tactless little sniveling pea! (wow, i spelled sniveling wrong the first time i wrote it. *wails* my intelligence is fading...)
so sevvy goes and gives you a warm and cuddly hug and you start ranting about how he doesn't care about you?! you're like...you know, those little insensitive boys that the yahoo homepage likes to put in little categories for romance-craving-mad-girls!
i feel like a bit of a moron myself, actually, seeing as i'm breathing heavily and ranting wildly to a fictional character.
ookay, time to change the topic.
favorite quotes! woot!
"What I want, Potter," Snape says, leaping to his feet, only just managing to control the volume of his voice, "is to know what sort of twisted emotional alchemy has so warped your brain that you dare not lift your hand against those who would harm you!"
hehe, the first reason is just because i like the picture snape's greasy hair doing this tornado jig thing as he does some superman impression of jumping to his feet. it's very cool.
the second reason is because i like imagining him saying "twisted emotional alchemy." the attack of the multi-syllable words, you know...
oy, my other favorite quote...
He has not provoked the boy in this manner because he has any hope of forcing him to elocute that formless dread in his heart.
you can probably guess why...see, there's the word ELOCUTE in there! it, along with the seven pages of words i have listed out in a word document for the last year (aptly titled, "cool words," to show my utter finesse in the art of the english language), OWNS!
anywho. yeah, i got this little thrill of mindless joy reading that.
anyway, i suppose this is the moment you're supposed to yell at me because i'm reviewing all late and stuff, and i like, just professed by oath of fangirl-hood to you last time....so yeah. my apologies.
i did read this you know, but it was one of those read-in-the-middle-of-the-night-and-leak-tears-of-sleeplessness-out-into-the-carpet sort of things.
and i probably would have sounded delirious and junk if i had tried to compose out some review, so i decided to procrastinate (my finest talent) and review later.
yeah.
and then you had to go and churn out another chapter, and i got this really mixed feeling of excitement and guilt, so here i am-ses. reviewing.
finally.
awesome chappie.
Author's Response: I confess that when I said "elocute" I did think about you. Take it as a shout-out if you like. :) Even though my spellchecker didn't recognize it, they use it on Law and Order all the time, so to hell with WordPerfect.