the Black Cat
Ravenclaw!
Picks up where HBP left off. Harry returns to Privet Drive one last time completely unaware of the evil that has taken root within Number 4. He must rely on his own strength and his ability to put aside past differences when Snape rescues him. He finds unexpected allies in his journey to destroy the Horcruxes.
Takes Place: None
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Snape flavour: None
Tags: Adoption
Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Membership status: Administrator
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Reviews by Jan_AQ
Rated: 16+
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Torture
Chapters: 5 - Completed: No - Updated: 05 Apr 2006 / 21 Mar 2006
Series: None - Challenges: None
Chapters: 5 - Completed: No - Updated: 05 Apr 2006 / 21 Mar 2006
Series: None - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 | 24 Mar 2006 |
| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) |
- Great chapter. Poor Harry, wow. That was intense. You did a really good job with the memories. The smears of blood were particularly vivid. It was good that Snape told Harry that it wasn't his fault so vehemently that Harry started to have doubts that it was. I hope that Harry will be able to someday heal from this. Good job.
Author's Response:
Wow, I thank you for reviewing each chapter as you went. I like it when people give me their thoughts on each particular chapter and I have encountered reviewers who will only review the last chapter even if there are many when they first stumble upon the story. So thank you for taking the time to give me your thoughts on each chapter.
Thank you for the honest, constructful review. I appreciate it. I just read the first six chapters (I have two more that I\'m still tweaking and therefore have yet to be posted) and I am reworking the first ones a bit because I am unhappy with the flow.
Again, thank you for the reviews.
Harry is in for a full summer dealing with the Slytherins. After his family dies, Snape if forced to take him to Spencer Academy for the summer. New enemies, new friends, new powers. Mentor!Snape and eventually Guardian!Snape.
Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Adoption
Categories: Misc
Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Adoption
Categories: Misc
Rated: K
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Warnings: Alcohol Use, Character Death, Rape, Self-harm
Chapters: 5 - Completed: No - Updated: 28 Mar 2006 / 22 Mar 2006
Series: None - Challenges: None
Chapters: 5 - Completed: No - Updated: 28 Mar 2006 / 22 Mar 2006
Series: None - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 1: Deaths in the Family | 22 Mar 2006 |
| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) |
- Great start. One typo really stood out to me though: "You were in the deepest state of sleep, you’re mind and soul weren’t present in your body." Your. I really like the premise so far! Interesting idea to have Harry go to a school for purebloods. I can't wait to see what it will be like! And who's his roommate? I'm a little concerned about the warnings but I guess we'll have to wait and see. :)
Author's Response: Thank you. You\'ll probably be suprised by who his roommate is. Thank you for pointing out my typo to me, I went back and corrected it. I try to edit my work but you know how it is when you\'re working on the same piece for a long time. Thanks for the review.
| Title: Chapter 2: Slaves to the Past | 23 Mar 2006 |
| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) |
Neville Longbottom?!?! OH MAN, you were right, I am shocked! :) That is so great though. I loved your characterization of Neville at the beginning- the reasons why he was sent to this school. I love Malfoy's polished manner around Snape after Harry's found Neville. Nice contrast. Your premise rocks! Great idea for a story and you're doing an admirable job realizing it. Keep with it! :) Poor Neville, I haven't really seen this side of Neville before and I'm really interested to see the interaction between Harry and Neville and really interested in Harry and Draco. And Harry and Snape, of course! Wow, you have lots to do and lots of material to get through is the main purpose of this story is to show the interaction between Harry and Snape. Great job so far, I really like the setting of the school, the sunlight in the potions classroom was a nice touch to change the setting from Hogwarts to this more modern feeling (well to me at least) school. Thank you for sharing!
Here's the typos I noticed that you may want to check out when you have time:
On the way up he caught sight of a rather large library and her thought (he)
"Potter. Longbottom, will make a rather good roommate for you. (Potter, Longbottom, would)
I think I can handle that, Harry thought bitterly. (your italics ran on the first, which I assume is a accident repeat)
This took a considerable amount of time to do and he was very late by time he got there he was very late. (delete the second one)
Somehow the chase didn’t bother his though (thoughts?)
(I think you're misisng a line here:)
You’re lucky. Draco wants to make peace with you." Pansy explained quietly, although not quietly enough.
"Harry, you shouldn’t be wandering around the manor after hours. It’s against the rules." Unfortunately Harry could see in the boy’s eyes that he secretly wanted to go with them and was rather put off by not being invited. (add in maybe a line like 'Neville sat up and looked at Harry' between the paragraphs?)
he drew it across bringing forth a small stream of blood fell down his arm and onto the green bed sheets. (falling)
Wait!" Harry said, grabbing her arm, "Won’ the teachers (Won't)
Pretty soon the sun came up and then the potions’ classroom began to fill up. (mention beforehand that the place where Harry is stealing stuff is the classroom and not Snape's office and that Harry was aware of students behind him)
"Mr. Potter." He drawled, as if it were the most natural (Snape)
(Right before this part you need to have some sort of identifier that the scene and time is changing, maybe a ----- .)
Sitting on the cold stone floor
Harry snuck a look over at draco (Draco)
| Title: Chapter 3: Goodbye Sirius | 23 Mar 2006 |
| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) |
- Great chapter, I like this setting. The dreams/visions are very interesting, nice visuals. I was shocked to see that Elvira was Snape's wife and that he had a child- nice job shocking us along with Harry. :) I really like Draco's struggles, and the conversations are done quite nicely. The way Harry pushed Draco into the lake was great. Whatever happened to the diary? I'll send you a list of typos to your e-mail instead of posting them here.
| Title: Chapter 4: Choices | 26 Mar 2006 |
| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) |
- Haha! Nice chapter. The vision was very interesting.. so Harry that now and in the past? His visions are very intruiging. I like how human Snape is - it was very dramatic in that scene. His choice seemed very in character for both of them, I liked how Elvira seemed to tell him with her eyes that that was the right choice. So did Harry save her? I think he did...
Author's Response: Your review made me so happy because that was exactly what I was trying to do, make Snape seem human. Yes, Harry did save her, although he doesn\'t realize what happened,
Response to the Potions and Snitches.net Fic Fest Challenge # 5 by Bil. Although I’m not sure it is completely compliant. I tried though.
Harry gets up one morning and begins to make breakfast (for the Dursleys, if that's where he is). Hearing a noise at the door he cautiously goes to investigate - to find a battered Snape collapsed on the front doorstep. What happened to Snape, why is he in Harry's neighborhood and what in Merlin's name is Harry going to do with him?
Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe, Child fic, Deaging, Snape-meets-Dursleys, SuperPower! Harry
Categories: Reverse Roles > Parental Harry, Reverse Roles > Healer Harry, Reverse Roles > Big Brother Harry
Harry gets up one morning and begins to make breakfast (for the Dursleys, if that's where he is). Hearing a noise at the door he cautiously goes to investigate - to find a battered Snape collapsed on the front doorstep. What happened to Snape, why is he in Harry's neighborhood and what in Merlin's name is Harry going to do with him?
Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe, Child fic, Deaging, Snape-meets-Dursleys, SuperPower! Harry
Categories: Reverse Roles > Parental Harry, Reverse Roles > Healer Harry, Reverse Roles > Big Brother Harry
Rated: T
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys
Chapters: 3 - Completed: No - Updated: 28 Oct 2006 / 22 Mar 2006
Series: None - Challenges: Battered Snape for Breakfast
Chapters: 3 - Completed: No - Updated: 28 Oct 2006 / 22 Mar 2006
Series: None - Challenges: Battered Snape for Breakfast
| Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 | 23 Mar 2006 |
| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) |
Great beginning! Poor Hedwig!! :( I like how the neighbbors and such are aware of the problem and the worry of Petunia that they might do something. Poor Harry, I hope that someone helps him get out of this mess. Perhaps Snape? I like how Snape realized at the end what Harry's life is like. It was nicely done, and not "usual" feeling even though many stories follow that line. You have a couple of typos you may want to go over if you have some time later.
Author's Response:
Glad you liked it Jan, I felt sorry for Hedwig, but it was necessary for the plot to go on. About Snape you\'ll see what he does next.I believe it\'s quite unexpcted, although the plot has been used before.
I'll correct the typos and repost the corrected chapter
| Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 | 27 Mar 2006 |
| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) |
- Wow!! Great premise!! I'm very intruiged, wow. So what happens next? I wanna read more! The thought that went into this, by yourself and Severus, is incredible. Wonderfully done!
Author's Response:
Glad you liked it Jan. :)
I really wanted to add something different since Laume\'s \'Six Years to Life\' was such a wonderful story. Besides I have always considered Severus to be a thinker, and not prone (except where Harry is concerned) to do things whithout analizing them through. I wanted to portray that part of his \'personality.
I\'m working on the next chapter although a have a draft of it already posted in my LiveJournal (I erroneously posted it as chapter two). There will be differences between that one and the final chapter three, but the gist is the same.
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During OotP, Harry comes across an injured kitten. Its owner isn’t too happy about this.
Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: None
Categories: Teacher Snape > Professor Snape
Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: None
Categories: Teacher Snape > Professor Snape
Rated: K+
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Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 25 Mar 2006 / 25 Mar 2006
Series: None - Challenges: Whose Kitten Is This?
Chapters: 1 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 25 Mar 2006 / 25 Mar 2006
Series: None - Challenges: Whose Kitten Is This?
| Title: Chapter 1: Catastrophic | 25 Mar 2006 |
| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) |
- Hahaha! So cute! :) The kitten had great characterization. ;) It's name is so Snape. Thanks for writing it and sharing!
During Occulmency lessons in the course of Harry Potter and the Order of the Phoenix, Severus notices something... off in Harry's memories.
Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Adoption, Alternate Universe, Snape-meets-Dursleys
Categories: Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape, Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Adoption, Alternate Universe, Snape-meets-Dursleys
Categories: Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape, Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Rated: T
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Neglect, Profanity, Violence
Chapters: 17 - Completed: No - Updated: 12 Dec 2010 / 27 Mar 2006
Series: None - Challenges: None
Chapters: 17 - Completed: No - Updated: 12 Dec 2010 / 27 Mar 2006
Series: None - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 1: Orsa | 27 Mar 2006 |
| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) |
- Ouuuu... great start! Very nicely done with writing and unfolding the opening chapter. You've managed to pique my interest and enjoy it. I like the events that played out- it flowed very well and it wasn't stale. All are in character, very much so, and the fandom aspect of Severus and Lily was handled well. You did a good job incorporating new canon into a past year. Great pace, and good intensity. I want to read more!
Author's Response: Thank you! This is my first attempt at Harry Potter fic, actually. I aim for as IC as I can manage, and I\'m planning on a very slow evolution of their relationship and altering the OOtP timeline a little. I\'m hoping for regular updates, but I can\'t guarentee anything. This is a WIP, so it\'s not finished, though I do have some buffer.
| Title: Chapter 2: Percunctor | 05 Apr 2006 |
| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) |
- Wow. Powerful chapter. Harry rings so true. Wonderful, wonderful writing in thsi chapter. I can't wait to read more and see how this all unfolds. Thanks for sharing! And update when you can please! :D
Author's Response: Thanks! I\'m calling this an exercise in writing teenagers. ;) I\'m glad you\'re enjoying it, and look for an update sometime next week.