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With a strange potion, new location and the odd Muggle Studies Professor along for the ride, Harry's in for an interesting summer, but why is Snape here? Dumbledore had better pray he gets all three back in one piece! Humor, Angst, No Mary Sues, No Romance, no real plot.
Takes Place: 6th summer
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Snape flavour: Snape is Kind, Snape is Stern
Tags: Child fic, Deaged!Harry, Deaging, Injured!Harry
Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Membership status: Member
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Reviews by MollyMorrison
Rated: K+
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys
Chapters: 32 - Completed: No - Updated: 17 Jul 2016 / 15 Jan 2005
Series: None - Challenges: None
Chapters: 32 - Completed: No - Updated: 17 Jul 2016 / 15 Jan 2005
Series: None - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 1: The Situation | 24 Jan 2005 |
| Reviewer: Molly Morrison (Signed) |
- This is great!! Did I ever actually read the beginning, or have you been showing me snippets from the very beginning? Anyway, it all seems fresh and new to me, so props for that either way. :-) I especially like how you gave Dumbledore's perspective, and dealt with the Dursleys without him condoning their abuse. I have to admit I like DD bashing, but when you deal with it this well, I can deal with agreeable!Dumbledore too. (Especially when I know he's out of the picture for pretty much the rest of the fic.) Anyway, remind me to talk to you about transitions of emotions.. I think I noticed some rough spots, but since I'm racing, I don't want to stop to talk about that now! Going on to chapter 2...
Author's Response: Nope! I've just been showing you little bits as they come to me. Yes, do tell me of the rough spots, perfectionist that I am I wish to fix them! Fix Fix Fix!
| Title: Chapter 2: Introducing the Muggle Studies Professor | 24 Jan 2005 |
| Reviewer: Molly Morrison (Signed) |
- Ahh, Hoppity. I love your anti-Mary Sue. It's a nice touch that she's so obviously ludicrous, in the way that Mary Sues are underlyingly. :-) So many fun lines that make me smile, in this chapter! :-D
Oh, by the way--hate to bug you about this, but I think I'm going to have to start giving classes on punctuation, since I'm a professional nitpicker. ;-) You have two common problems: a complete lack of hyphens, and the always popular run-on sentence. Ask me what I mean, and remind me that I found lots of ready examples in chapter 2, and I'll teach you like I did Corbin. ;-)
Author's Response: Haha, you can be the puncuation Big Sister! Wheeeeeee!!! Lack of hyphens? You are a hyphens supplier. :P No hyphens! Tell me about these run-on sentences. I KNOOOOOWW that I use them, I just don't always figure out how to fix them.
| Title: Chapter 3: The Third Party | 24 Jan 2005 |
| Reviewer: Molly Morrison (Signed) |
- You know what one of the things I like about Muggleville is? Instead of brushing over the explanation of WHY Harry and Snape have to spend time together, or WHY Harry should be deaged, or WHY they shouldn't use magic, you explain all that.. but you do it in a fun, interesting way, so that I am not bored out of my mind with the explanation, either. It's a great balance.
Then again, there's a possibility that I love that because we have so much in common. ;-) Anyway, yeah--lots of lovely sneering coming from Snape this chapter, but he gave in pretty easily, it seemed. Then again, Dumbledore does have a lot of power over him, and he IS between a rock and a hard place, so to speak. So I guess I believe it.. I just think I might have liked one more token protest, before he gave in. But it's your fic and I'm loving it, despite these little recommendations for possible improvement I'm giving. ;-) One to chapter 4...
Author's Response: I can add another token protest in there somewhere... Yes! Fun and interesting ways so that you aren't bored out of your mind are key!!! I refuse to have bored readers. :P
lol@"I'm loving it, despite these little recommendations for possible" improvement" Haha.
| Title: Chapter 4: The Deaging Potion | 24 Jan 2005 |
| Reviewer: Molly Morrison (Signed) |
- Actually, I never thought that Harry was going to jump off the trampoline into the mirror, or that Dumbledore intended it. :-P It's probably a wizarding one with wards around the edges so he can't come off it high in the air, anyway.
I love your description of childhood here--of the Potion, and the experience of shrinking, and how different everything looked, and how curious Harry was.. so fun! I don't remember my childhood all that well, and what I do remember is for the most part not happy things ( :-( ) so this is a great adventure, and very soothing in a sense. I'm on to read more! :-D
Author's Response: Yeah, a lot of people don't think that either but I thought that it would be funny to have in the Author's Notes. Yay for soothing child Harry senses!
| Title: Chapter 5: Introductions | 24 Jan 2005 |
| Reviewer: Molly Morrison (Signed) |
- LOL, the little piece of your conversation with Star at the end of the chapter was amusing. ;-)
By the way, have I mentioned how I love the look of the site? It's SOO much easier to read things here than it is on FF.net--better font (I think, or so it seems), better background, easier on the eyes.. I'm a happy reader! Combine that with a great story (MUGGLEVILLE!) and life is very, very good. Now if only my aunt and uncle would get home.. ;-)
Poor Harry. The wand being taken away was a severe blow, worsened by it being given to Snape. I think it was a "good" choice by Dumbledore to not tell Harry that Snape was going to be his "father" for the duration--he would most certainly have refused, vocally. However, as it is, Harry's going to be rather angry at Dumbledore, I'd wager. Or maybe you're going to work it out so he's not.. I guess I'll have to read on to see!
Author's Response: YAY! YOU LOVE MY SITE! YAAAAAYYY!!!!! And you can pick what background you want too by picking a different layout. The font is Times New Roman... I think. *sings her life is good song* La la la laaaaa... I just love a little angry Harry in the morning...
| Title: Chapter 6: Welcome to British Airlines | 24 Jan 2005 |
| Reviewer: Molly Morrison (Signed) |
- Ooh.. like I said in my last review, it's so much nicer seeing things through child-like eyes! :-) I have flown soo many times now that I am bored stiff. I could recite the whole thing to you, but I no longer think about how odd it is that the seats are flotation devices or think (much) about stepping over that annoying gap between the terminal arm and the plane itself. Much more fun to see it from Harry's perspective, like it's fun to listen to little kids when it's their first time and they actually make comments about things. :-D Moving on the next chapter, happily. :-)
Author's Response: You know what's really funny? All Harry's thoughts are stuff that I thought about. I get really silly on planes, or maybe it's my brother making me silly? Whenever we are together and doing anything new we just get... silly! And so childish. It's probably just my over active imagination and good memory but it was really easy to put what a child would think of when they go on a plane for the first time.
| Title: Chapter 7: Agent D, and the Spotting of the Dragon | 24 Jan 2005 |
| Reviewer: Molly Morrison (Signed) |
- IIRC, you don't like writing Snape. I don't know why, though, because you seem to be pretty good at it. ;-) I liked this chapter--especially the dragon, and Harry's first indications (to Snape and Hoppity) of his neglect by the Dursleys.
Sorry, but I'm not going to be able to finish tonight. I need to sleep. Hopefully, I'll be able to finish reading in the morning! :-) FINISH THE CHAPTER! *smiles angelically*
Author's Response: Oh thanks. Snape can be entertaining to write but it's just so annoying to me to watch after all his thoughts and motivations when the things in the scene continue.
Don't you bat your eyelashes and smile at me! :P I was stuck here last night by myself on this stupid chapter. I posted it. I hope you're happy. XP *bop!* :)
| Title: Chapter 8: Not Another Plane Ride | 26 Jan 2005 |
| Reviewer: Molly Morrison (Signed) |
- Gah, my brain is so fried. Remind me to review this chapter again when it's less fried--it was fun to read things that I definitely had not read before, though. :-)
Author's Response: Fried brain, fried brain! *tap dances on it*
| Title: Chapter 9: Settling In | 26 Jan 2005 |
| Reviewer: Molly Morrison (Signed) |
- Well, Snape using magic is certainly not going to last long. :-P Aww, and poor Harry, not feeling comfortable on the bed. Was he just too tired, before? Why isn't crawling under the covers good enough?
I love how the perspectives of each character are so different. You do such a good job especially of capturing child!Harry and confused!Hoppity. ;-) I want to keep reading! (It really is a test of my patience to try to review every chapter--I just want to click to the next one!)
Author's Response: Yay! Thank you. :D
Abused children will often sleep under beds... it's like a way that they feel safer. Harry is more likely to miss the closed in feeling he used to have with his closet when he was a child and especially since as he is now smaller, everything seems much much bigger. It's a new place, a new room, and he's had alot going on. He might just feel an urge to have somewhere safe to rest. Well, safer.
| Title: Chapter 10: The Mall Trip | 26 Jan 2005 |
| Reviewer: Molly Morrison (Signed) |
- Hmm. Snape reminds me of my dad, only he (Snape) is never in a good mood. :-P But when my dad is in a bad mood, he gets into this mode where he just wants to make everyone else miserable (as miserable as he, presumably, is). So I can completely understand where poor Harry is coming from. It's a good thing he doesn't have a long time with Snape, as he's not going to create any *better* behavioral patterns with Snape than he did with the Dursleys. Just different, really. Okay, on to the next chapter now!
Author's Response: Well I think that Snape will mellow out a little bit so it won't really hurt Harry to spend any long time with him. He will have to get used to having such a strict person looking after him- in the long run if he stayed years with Snape as a child it might do something but as this will only be 2 months (less really) it won't hurt him. Plus he has Hoppity as a balencing influence, as well as all the other children's parents around.