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Rather than allowing Harry to stay at Diagon Alley after he blew up Aunt Marge, the Ministry sends Harry back to the Dursleys. Harry returns to school after a terrible summer, to find that he's not the only one with this kind of secret. A student has been killed by his family. New screening measures are put into place by the Ministry: Every student must be given a medical exam and interview to look for child abuse. With Dumbledore facing an inquiry, Snape is entrusted with the task of making sure EVERYONE receives one.
Takes Place: 3rd Year
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Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe, Snape-meets-Dursleys
Categories: Healer Snape, Parental Snape > Biological Father Snape, Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Title: Chapter 37: The Storyteller
| 21 Nov 2011
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Reviewer: kazza (Signed)
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Lovely end to the chapter. It reminds me of the grandfather's comment in 'The Princess Bride' - as you wish.
Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10
| 21 Nov 2011
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Reviewer: kazza (Signed)
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Another wonderful chapter! Severus's empathy is very moving
Challenge:Harry falls through the ice, guess who saves him once again?
Takes Place: 4th summer
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Snape flavour: None
Tags: None
Categories: Healer Snape, Teacher Snape > Professor Snape
Rated: K
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Warnings: None
Chapters: 1
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Completed: Yes
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Updated: 17 Nov 2011 / 17 Nov 2011
Series: None
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Challenges: Hypothermia
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Hypothermia
| 21 Nov 2011
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Reviewer: kazza (Signed)
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A nice vignette. I like it a lot. One little suggestion - the rhythm of the story might flow a little better if the longer paragraphs in the second half were split into 2 or 3 paragraphs. I'm not suggesting that you change a single word, but just reflect that lovely minimalist style of the first half in the second half.
Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2
| 21 Nov 2011
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Reviewer: kazza (Signed)
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Intriguing start. I can see Sirius behaving like that. I hope Harry and Ron survive their mischief :)
Author's Response: I know so I can I, and thats why it wasnt as hard to write as I thought, he was always so hotheaded. Leaving after being told to stay, you just know there gonna get caught lol
Title: Chapter 1: Reciprocity
| 21 Nov 2011
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Reviewer: kazza (Signed)
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Bravo! I agree with you about the challenges of present tense. However, you have used the strengths of present tense (explaining motivation and emotion) wonderfully here. Again, Bravo!
Title: Chapter 1: To Have a Name
| 20 Aug 2012
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Reviewer: kazza (Signed)
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A wonderful, bittersweet story. I'm not sure that Severus is much out of character. He might have behaved that way given the chance
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