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The Heir to Prince Manor by Snapegirl, DaughterOfAres starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 828]
When Harry wakes one morning, he discovers a badly injured Snape in his living room, and tries to hide him. But Petunia discovers them and reveals a secret she has kept for thirteen years--one that will change the course of Harry's life forever, and Severus's as well. AU, pre-GOF.

Takes Place: 4th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe, Kidnapped, Snape-meets-Dursleys
Categories: Parental Snape > Biological Father Snape
Rated: T - Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Alcohol Use, Character Death, Physical Punishment Spanking, Profanity, Violence
Chapters: 35 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 19 Aug 2008 / 15 May 2008
Series: Prince Manor - Challenges: None
Title: Chapter 35: Farewell to Prince Manor 04 Jul 2011
Reviewer: LilyRaye (Signed)
    Thank you for writing this story and sharing it with us. I really enjoyed reading it.

Vows II: Duty by Zarathustra starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 83]
Sequel to Vows. Join the Snapes as they explore their new family relationship and solve the mystery of why an Azkaban escapee has followed Harry all the way to Hogwarts.

Takes Place: 3rd Year - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Adoption, Azkaban Character
Categories: Parental Snape > Biological Father Snape > Severitus Challenge
Rated: T - Warnings: None
Chapters: 18 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 26 Oct 2009 / 30 Jun 2009
Series: Vows Series - Challenges: None
Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18 30 Jul 2011
Reviewer: LilyRaye (Signed)
    I recently found your stories, and have read through them all at once - barely able to pry myself from the screen. I am commenting at the end rather than each chapter, but I want to complement you on the great quality of the whole story. Thank you for writing and sharing this. It's an excellent story - well thought out, well written, and well edited. Your characters are well developed and believable. The situations are realistic for the setting and neither overblown nor glossed over.

    Getting rid of the time turner and having more students involved worked out really well for this scenario. With Harry having a concerned parent on-hand, Dumbledore's encouraging the students to use a time-turner to go back and fix things didn't really fit.

    The animals were fun, especially the battles between Crookshanks and Scabbers.

    Harry's patronus was great, and his dealing with the false dementors during the Quidditch game was fun. (Just an editing/continuity point, I noticed that the number of false dementor students changed from 4 to three at one point in chapter thirteen.)

    Again, thank you for all your hard work and sharing this story with us.

Vows III: Honour by Zarathustra starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 59]
Sequel to Vows and Duty: Join the Snape boys as they face the dangers of Harry's fourth year.

Takes Place: 4th Year - Snape flavour: None
Tags: None
Categories: Parental Snape > Biological Father Snape > Severitus Challenge
Rated: T - Warnings: None
Chapters: 22 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 27 Feb 2011 / 08 May 2010
Series: Vows Series - Challenges: None
Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22 31 Jul 2011
Reviewer: LilyRaye (Signed)
    Thank you for writing this and sharing it with us. It was very well written. I like how it incorporated the events of the book but did not stick so closely to canon events. The characters were well thought out and the story moved along nicely.

    I liked how Harry dealt with the dragons and Snape's panic at Harry's alternate plan if speaking to the dragons hadn't worked.

    I'm glad Cedric survived and Lucius didn't.

    I enjoyed how you fixed the Yule Ball. Harry seemed too awkward in the original and ratty robes are hard to believe in a school of witches and wizards. The return of the dungeon bat was fun. Snape can't turn too mellow, then he wouldn't be believable.

    Dumbledoor's manipulations are exposed here. Harry will be more wary in the future. How will that affect the revelation of the prophecy and the search for the horcruxes (no clue if that's the correct plural or not)?

    A question...(or several)... In the previous story, Harry's patronus was a panther, but Lupin told Harry it could change with emotional turmoil. In this story it was a stag. Was this a deliberate change? Will he continue alternating patronus animals as he matures and experiences more difficulties and turmoil?

    I really hope you continue this series. I'd love to see how the year is different with Snape aware of Harry's visions - and with Harry more in control of his mind. If Bill is teaching defense, will Umbridge manage to invade the school? Perhaps as History teacher, to replace Binns? Will Severus continue in his role as head of Slytherin, despite no longer being a spy or paying lip service to the side of Voldemort?

    Author's Response:

    Thank you for the wonderful reviews. People are always catching the "Flints" when they come to these stories and read them all at once! Mea culpa on all of them. Although - I love your  explanation of the change in the Patronus - works better than "I forgot!" Although it would work even better if it had been the other way around, the stag first and then the panther... 20/20 hind vision. One of these days I'll go back and fix it.

    I was just rereading my stuff in preparation for plotting year 5 and totally missed the 4 - 3 "dementors". Great catch! Cookies of your choice to you!

     

    I loved making sure that Snape got to be Dungeon Bat again - he is always so fun to write as a snark. :-)

     

    Again, thank you for the heartfelt reviews!


Burnt by lastcrazyhorn starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 307]
A disabled Harry comes to Hogwarts story. Everyone expects him to be like his dad, but how can he be with such a different past? A Slytherin Harry takes on Hogwarts in an unusual way.

Takes Place: 1st Year - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe, Physical Impairment, Runaway, Slytherin!Harry
Categories: Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape, Master Snape > Apprentice Harry
Rated: 16+ - Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Character Bashing, Neglect, Violence
Chapters: 37 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 21 Aug 2017 / 29 Mar 2011
Series: None - Challenges: More Than Meets the Eye, Hoarding Food
Title: Chapter 12: Progress 18 Aug 2011
Reviewer: LilyRaye (Signed)
    This story is very well written. I like how you're exploring the characters and not having Harry be happy and cheerful after the horror of his earlier life. Thank you for writing and sharing it with us.

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