Title: Chapter 5: A Swiflty Tilting Perspective
| 04 Jun 2013
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Reviewer: 12reader (Signed)
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Whew! I was afraid that Severus was going to lash out physically (wouldn't blame him). It's easy to imagine Harry winning over someone fast when there's no "Boy-Who-Lived" nonsense in the way. Perhaps it would be best for Severus to have a slight breakdown later on with his grandfather in private, just to further the healing process. Just a thought. You're doing good.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading, and for sharing your thoughts with me. A breakdown would probably be a good thing - even though breakdowns, when they are happening, rarely feel good until well afterward when one can see clearly through the heartache and pain. In my initial writing of this story, nothing of the sort happens, and neither did what was in this chapter. I have been re-working some of the events of this story, but am not sure if I will include what you've suggested or not.
Thank you so much!