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Kirinin [Contact] Better be Gryffindor!
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Hi!  My name is Kirinin, and I've been writing fanfiction for over ten years, now.  My initial fandom was Ranma 1/2.  After having a lot of fun with this fandom for around five years, I decided to branch out.

My first completed Harry fic is Secret of Slytherin, which was initially on fanfiction-dot-net.  I have to say that writing and posting this story has been one of the most fun and interesting literary experiences I've had.  For one thing, the tale started off as a bedtime story, meant to be shared with someone verbally, so it had to have a certain cadence.  Then, when I initially posted it, the feedback was thoughtful and thorough - to the point that people brought up and argued issues I'd never even thought of.  Some or the reviews themselves are works of art, and I've met a lot of great people through their analyses of the story. 

It's wonderful to be able to share SoS with a new fanfiction community here, and give the story some more life.  :)

Secret of Slytherin now has a sequel called Geas of Gryffindor.  While Severus and Harry are very important characters in that tale, they are no longer its sole focus, which is why I have chosen not to post it here.  Please check it out on fanfiction.net, or on Archive of Our Own, where I am posting Secret of Slytherin and Geas of Gryffindor under the same penname.

I tend to like many if not all of the canon characters in the HP Universe, and really dislike it when an author is willing to demonize one set of characters to make the others look better.  My favorite characters to mess with are the Trio, Draco Malfoy, Severus Snape and Remus Lupin, but I'm willing to read anyone, so long as they're written thoughtfully.

As a final note, I tend to recommend stories I've enjoyed in my Author's Notes; I also have a C2 for Harry Potter fics on my fanfiction-dot-net account.  That is all.

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Past Featured Story Harry Potter and the Ferratilis Potion by Arualcopia starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 287]
At the Dursleys the summer after Sirius' death, Voldemort sends werewolves to attack Harry. Taken to Grimmauld Place by his rescuer, Severus Snape, Harry devises a disastrous plan to rescue Sirius from the veil, resulting in his being transfigured into a baby. Snape is the only one who can brew the potion to restore him, and is the only one to realize that Harry still retains his 16 year-old-mind. Over the summer and the first two potions which restore him to age eleven, Harry begins to feel that Snape is the only one who understands and can protect him. Is he right or has his deaging muddled his thinking? AU story for 6th year.

Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Adoption, Baby fic, Child fic, Deaging
Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Rated: 16+ - Warnings: None
Chapters: 26 - Completed: No - Updated: 14 Nov 2007 / 15 May 2006
Series: None - Challenges: None
Title: Chapter 20: It's Time 11 Apr 2007
Reviewer: Kirinin (Signed)
    Gah! See, I don't think I got this far the first time I read this through... onto new territory now. And cliffies.

Title: Chapter 21: The Escape 11 Apr 2007
Reviewer: Kirinin (Signed)
    "...as if commenting on the decorum..." I think you mean 'decor', there; decorum is behaviour, usually tactful behaviour; decor is the way a room is decorated.

    The death of both of Draco's parents in more or less the same moment is horrific. This was a very powerful, very difficult chapter.

    -K

Title: Chapter 22: Repercussions and Recovery 11 Apr 2007
Reviewer: Kirinin (Signed)
    You did make us think he'd die, didn't you? But it was Lucius and Narcissa. Not as bad, but still pretty harsh and abrupt...

    I do wonder why it was that Lucius helped Snape in the end. Were they really that close? Looked at from a wider perspective, Lucius was in essence holding Snape's safety higher than that of his wife or son... he had to know they would immediately become targets. Did he owe Snape? Did he suddenly have the epiphany that he was living a lie and pushing his whole family to do the same? His own story here is a yawning gap in your tale - not that you necessarily could have managed to tell his story at the same time as Harry's and Snape's.

    It's strange, though, that he sacrificed so much - and, from our POV, so quickly.

    -K

Title: Chapter 23: Trust 11 Apr 2007
Reviewer: Kirinin (Signed)
    Yay, more Draco! You know I like him.

    I expect him to have had serious troubles with the past couple of days; and, no matter how fond I am of Draco and Harry getting along, it's entirely possible that Draco will hate him more than ever, blaming him for everything.

    I hope, through the re-introduction of Draco, you at least partially allude to Lucius's change of heart.

    Funny, I thought your Ron wouldn't be so upset as the others concerning Snape's guardianship of Harry. After all, he's the one who's been bringing Harry to Snape all along, in the night - and, there was that time where he brought Harry down to the Gryffindor common room and Harry was swept up into Snape's arms. Ron, more than anybody save Harry and Snape themselves, has seen their true relationship firsthand. Up until now he has viewed it with relative equanimity. I think (hope?) that once he gets over his surprise, he will stop being disapproving.

    Also, Ron's relationship with Harry has turned distinctly big-brother-like, a shift that Ron seems to have enjoyed. I think Ron will continue to be very protective of Harry despite the fact that Harry has regained his age and height, and maybe this is why he had such a strong reaction to Harry not becoming a Weasley: he half *already* thought he had a little brother. It doesn't seem like he'll want to let go of that new role.

    So far this story is great! I hope you continue soon.

    -Kirinin

    Author's Response: Thanks for all the reviews. I really do enjoy reading them all. As for a couple of your questions/comments. Um the first, Ron's reaction- I wanted him to react as he did, because he'd just been preparing up a room for his "little" brother. He won't stay mad forever. Another of your comments, I did give Lucius a reason... and I know I haven't said it yet... perhaps it's well overdue. It's hard to juggle so many story elements, but I'll try to work it in the next chapter or so...

Title: Chapter 24: Ecalp Dluammirg 25 Apr 2007
Reviewer: Kirinin (Signed)
    Eep! Cliffie, indeed.

    Gosh, though, if the house itself could move to poison its occupants, you'd think it would've done so before, with Remus or Sirius or any member of the Order, for example. Unless it requires Draco's aid? But if Draco was confined to his quarters until just then, how did he make a poison? (Just happen to have one on him?) Or perhaps there was some sort of passageway that Draco was led to somehow, with the help of the house itself?

    Ah, well - pointless speculation, I'm sure. I'm still enjoying this immensely!

    -K

Past Featured Story Somewhere I Belong by shadowarwen starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 94]
Severus Snape discovers a hidden truth about Harry's home life. And decides to take matters into his own hands. Please review!

Takes Place: 5th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: None
Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Rated: T - Warnings: Abusive Dursleys
Chapters: 17 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 07 Mar 2004 / 13 Apr 2003
Series: Somewhere I Belong - Challenges: None
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 27 Apr 2008
Reviewer: Kirinin (Signed)
    While I know that grammar isn't an issue for everyone, multiple errors can be distracting for me.

    For example, the Dursley house should be " the Dursleys' " because the house belongs to more than one Dursley. On the other hand Harry's "friend's" is just a plural, and doesn't need an apostrophe. In "...when you're owl's dead" 'your' is a possessive and therefore also doesn't need an apostrophe.

    Quotations normally have a comma within them rather than a period. For instance, "I'll tell." he blurted out suddenly. is usually written, "I'll tell," he blurted out suddenly. This makes the whole thing one sentence, one thought.

    'Smartass' is one word. 'All right' is two.

    Finally, there are some capitalization errors. Because 'the Headmaster' is a title of Dumbledore's, it should be capitalized rather than lowercase.

    In terms of plot/setup, from whom exactly has Uncle Vernon heard about the 'famous Harry Potter'? It seems unlikely he'd chat with any wizarding types in order to get this information.

    This story has lots of frogs, which means many people have gotten into it and loved your plot and characterization... but the grammar issue is a big one for me, so I have to stop here. :(

    Beta?

    -K

Past Featured Story Child's Play by libertineangel starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 133]
When Draco accidently uses a black curse on Harry and turns him into a baby, Dumbledore appoints Snape as his carer. Follow Harry's slow, strange journey back to fifteen - accompanied by Snape ...

Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Baby fic, Child fic, Deaging
Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Rated: T - Warnings: Alcohol Use
Chapters: 29 - Completed: No - Updated: 02 Sep 2008 / 08 Aug 2006
Series: None - Challenges: None
Title: Chapter 9: A Walk in the Park 17 Feb 2007
Reviewer: Kirinin (Signed)
    This is getting really good! I have to say a couple of things though... I am pretty certain it's Farmer in the Dell that's the old song kindergardeners sing. Also, if you're italicizing thoughts, it's odd to have them say "That was just what he needed" the way that Draco does awhile back... unless Draco is in the habit of thinking of himself in the third person. Usually that would be "That's just what I need". If you want to keep it as "that was just what he needed" you wouldn't italicize it.

    Nitpicky, I know...

    I love that they run into Sirius, and that Snape is apparently only able to accept baby-advice from people he doesn't already know. It's a very common sort of attitude, being too embarrassed or prideful to listen to advice from those you know well, but perfectly willing to heed the advice of a stranger.

    Harry's baby-mannerisms are all picture-perfect, really. He is just like a willful toddler (is there any other kind?).

    Harry's brief moment of realization was really quite well done. I felt sorry for him that most of it slipped rather immediately away.

    Good show so far! :)

    -K

    Author's Response: It's definitely the Farmers in his Den where I come from (thus speaks several years of playground school games) - I'm sure there are a few versions on the go though. I don't know about the thoughts. To me 'that was just what he needed' seems right? The narrator is king of narrating his thoughts??? But maybe you're right? Anyway thanks for the review

Title: Chapter 10: Grimmauld Place 17 Feb 2007
Reviewer: Kirinin (Signed)
    Sirius was good! He was very much in character. I like the fact that you made the captured children from the Pickles family... the plot thickens.

    Harry is going to be an interesting kid, being 'raised' with the help of so many different people - Hermione, Snape, Sirius, Draco and Dumbledore seem to all have significant roles in his life at this point.

    -K

Title: Chapter 11: The Catalyst 17 Feb 2007
Reviewer: Kirinin (Signed)
    Reeeally good. Up until this point, the story has been more or less similar to many other de-ageing stories I've seen. But now...

    First you've got the weird new magical creature. A seahorse in a waistcoat! Heh. Nice image, and I nearly spat out my soda when he spoke to Ron. (Some might say too much, but not me. Startling, yes... too much, not really.)

    Snape's sudden decision to do something about the Pickle family was also good and also quite unexpected. Good on him for trying something dangerous on behalf of a family he didn't even know very well...

    Finally, you have found a rare reader in me, because I'm honestly not all that concerned with Harry at this point. I'm much more interested in what is going on with Severus and Lucius and the general nature of the spell rather than on how Severus and Harry will become closer - because the latter is more or less a given. I could write that part *for* you, and so could anyone else who's read one or two of these. What's most interesting are the new elements you've introduced and how you handle *them*.

    Again, just my two knuts, as they say. ;) You've got me v. intrigued.

    -K

Title: Chapter 13: The Naughty Stool 18 Feb 2007
Reviewer: Kirinin (Signed)
    The 'naughty stool' is hilarious and quite right. I wonder if you are a parent or have read some books on parenting? Hmm.

    -K


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