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Reviews For Letting Go
Nice chappie, and I can't wait to see what happens next. Will Draco and Harry become friends, and how will Snape and Harry's relationship progress.
Please please pleeeease do a sequel!!! Author's Response: No sequel, but I will be adding more chapters to this story.
One correction, offered with respect. In the paragraph beginning: "My whole life, has been a wasted lie," Harry finally managed to choke out, confusing Severus even more. What was he on about? Now that Harry was there sitting in his office crying, a CHORD was struck in him..." The saying is a musical analogy, like an important harmony being heard for the first time. Anyway, thanks for all your hard work. Good story. Author's Response: Yes, the musical analogy was what I was going for, but it was very late when I was writing and was apparently too tired to spell anything right. Thanks for the help though.
A point of critique now, I somehow don't think that Severus would come to quite an accepting stance quite that quickly. But if you continue with it, I'm sure you could put in enough problems and head-buttings to compensate. Still though, that last spoken line of Snape's just didn't seem to flow with canon. Maybe if it had been thought and he said something simpler....Not sure what though. Simple yet elegant for this spot. I don't know, that line just seems too cheesy for me in context with the rest of the story so far for someone such as Snape to have said to Harry. Just my two cents, I'll be checking back frequently to see if you've updated. :D Author's Response: I have decided to continue, but the next chapter may be a few days in comming. As for Severus accepting Harry so quickly, I thought it should be like that because Harry showed him all of his emotions in his mind as well as what had actually happened. It was like an immediate understanding for Severus of Harry's inner-workings, and once Severus knew that he was his son, he really felt bad and wanted to help him. This will be explained a little more in the comming chapters. Already Severus has begun using that special tone with Harry that was previously only reserved for Lily, and has found himself in a place where he is seeing Harry as part of Lily rather than all James Potter, so I felt it was easy for him to make the transition after the thought/emotion sharing to Harry being a son that he wanted to help.
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