Potions and Snitches
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Title: The Hovel 01 Aug 2011 12:12 am
Reviewer: Whitsnitch91 (Signed) [Report This]
    Alright, Chapter two, again good chapter :)
    I like that Harry for once actually realizes how qualified Severus actually is and that he aknowledges it in a way too, and I like that Snape picks up on the attitude, he truly is not one that does well with attitude :)
    I like the plot so far, Sev making sure that they get out of Hogwarts safely and doublechecking with Malfoy, though I really dislike that man, and Sev obviously does as well.
    Great idea to have Sev play him like this.
    The only thing I was missing here was the interaction between Sev and Harry, but honestly, if I would have to find a spot for them to "interact" more, I wouldn't know where to put it, so I guess you did a great job, again.
    Can't wait for the next one, now that I stuck to my side of the deal :)
Title: A Required Change of Scenery 31 Jul 2011 11:57 pm
Reviewer: Whitsnitch91 (Signed) [Report This]
    So here the promised review :)
    First: I really like this idea, I always wondered while reading the books how Snape could willingly let dumbledore play with Harry's life so if he truly only ever wanted to protect him, so him taking matters into his own hands seems very promising.
    Second: Harry having this need to stay in the commonroom without any reason does incline that there is some connection both are unaware of and maybe even will stay so, but him being open and willing to listen to Severus, who truly has never sugarcoated anything for him, is totally in character.
    I'm going to skim over the next one and then review that as well and then I won't be able to wait for the third :)
    The only thing i was missing is Snape's normal illthinking of the boy, at least in regard to his father, there was no sneer, not anything that reminded me in some extent to the vile professor he always tried so hard to portray, but still great chapter!
Title: The Hovel 31 Jul 2011 4:57 pm
Reviewer: Phoenix1 (Signed) [Report This]
    I like this idea a hole lot better than JK's, I hated that Snape dies. I can't wait for the next chapter. Harry isn't as stupid as they try to make him be.

    Author's Response: I am truly honored that you wrote that :) Thank you so much!
Title: The Hovel 31 Jul 2011 4:56 pm
Reviewer: Pandora (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh dear! I wonder if it was wise to threaten Malfoy. Let's just hope his threats don't backfire on him.

    I'm interested to see how you will develop the story.
Title: The Hovel 31 Jul 2011 10:00 am
Reviewer: Emma (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Great I'm so looking forward to the rest of this story. I hope it's as much fun to write as it is to read.
Title: The Hovel 31 Jul 2011 6:23 am
Reviewer: graynavarre (Signed) [Report This]
    Nifty, but why doesn't Severus use a better shampoo. I mean he must have stood out to everyone.
Title: A Required Change of Scenery 31 Jul 2011 4:41 am
Reviewer: slashypotterness (Signed) [Report This]
    It seems like a very good idea but if you don't mind a little constructive criticism: you might want to get a Beta to help you with your grammar. Your sentences are a bit choppy, actually at times they are very choppy. I think you have a lot of periods in places that should have comas and you start a lot of sentences with words like “but” and “however” and it makes it really hard to read and it’s a tad distracting. A good stagey I do when editing my stories is reading it aloud-if you feel like you are pausing to much or are getting out of breath when reading chances are you need to ether combine some sentences or add some comas.
Title: A Required Change of Scenery 31 Jul 2011 1:08 am
Reviewer: ObsessiveaboutSnape (Signed) [Report This]
    I like it! I can't wait to read more! Good job!
Title: A Required Change of Scenery 30 Jul 2011 7:56 pm
Reviewer: silver-slytherin65 (Signed) [Report This]
    Nice start, please update soon. I always wondered why sev didn't just grab baby Harry and make a run for it:)
    Will they be on the road for a long time? Years?
    Are they gonna move from place to place, change their names and all that?
    Love it.
Title: A Required Change of Scenery 30 Jul 2011 6:41 pm
Reviewer: Diablos (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Brilliant start, almost had tears myself! Keep writing please!

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