Sounds interesting! Can't wait to read more. :)
Bah ha ha! Oh my gosh, this is glorious. I love what you did with the challenge! And the writing has that fun, in your face sort of style (all of the italicized words for emphasis) that just fits perfectly for a teen like Harry. All the characters were nicely done as well, and the humour was fun. I particularly loved the line about the revelation of what the spell did pretty much made Armageddon sound like teatime. Although, in that glorious line (I simply love it) there's an s on the end of sound that wiggled its way in there, so you know. I rather prefer to know these things in my own writing so I can fix it right away. Anyway, this really made me smile. Especially Dumbledore's intro with his obnoxious name and him grinning behind his steepled fingers - what an image!. I look forward to the next installment. Oh yeah, and welcome to Potions and Snitches!
| Title: One: The Start of a Bad Day
| 11 Jan 2014 7:15 pm
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| Reviewer: rosina (Signed)
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Like the start. More please!
Hey! Awesomesauce that you decided to answer this challenge! If I wasn't already still working on my own FF, I would have answered It myself - I just read it a couple days ago looking for new good stories. Speaking of which, you reAlly should attach the 'Attached At the Hip' challenge to this story, so that both the challenger knows someone has answered it, and people like me who look through specifically to find stories can see the challenge has been answered and find yours. You should be able to do this either via the 'answer this challenge' button underneath the actual challenge, or through the 'manage my stories' part of your account. If you have questions, you can always message an admin and they can go into the system and do it for you if you can't figure it out. Great start, please don't procrastinate and not update (my biggest obstacle), and I can wait to see more! Longer chapters are always appreciated too, if you can manage it. ;)
| Title: One: The Start of a Bad Day
| 11 Jan 2014 4:04 pm
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| Reviewer: Pandora (Signed)
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Great Start!
These two will kill each other. I bet that Malfoy never bargained for this, when he cast that spell. Hee hee. Snape will have him in detention until he graduates!
I hope though that Snape really gets to know Harry, and when he finds out what Umbridge is doing, that he strangles the toad!
I hope also that he gets to know what Harry's family is like. I am looking forward to seeing what you do with this story!
Good job.
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