Slytherin!
When Harry's visions of Voldemort start to cause problems, he is brought back to Hogwarts and arrangements are made to give him extra DADA lessons. 5th year, Snape-mentors-Harry fic. Not OotP-canon. WIP
Takes Place: 5th summer
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Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe, Snape-meets-Dursleys
Categories: Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape
Membership status: Member
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Reviews by SnowySleigh
Rated: T
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Warnings: None
Chapters: 11 - Completed: No - Updated: 05 Nov 2005 / 29 Jan 2005
Series: None - Challenges: None
Chapters: 11 - Completed: No - Updated: 05 Nov 2005 / 29 Jan 2005
Series: None - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 11: Chp. 10: Death and Distraction | 19 Aug 2007 |
| Reviewer: SnowySleigh (Signed) |
- I can't believe you even under 50 reviews for this fic; it is very well-written and a lot of attention is paid to characterization.
I've really enjoyed the way you write Snape, and appreciate that you're taking time to develop the relationship between him and Harry. Often I've read fics where Snape helps Harry when he's in distress (as Harry was, with the cumulative effect of the Cruciatus), and afterwards their relationship feels rushed. The same is not true here; Snape still gets annoyed with Harry from time to time, and his opinions don't change all at once.
I hope you do update this eventually; I think you have an interesting power for Harry to have acquired in the Sensitive's gift, and I'm interested to see the benefits/disadvantages of it.
In the summer after fifth year, Harry's done sharing everything. It's his turn to keep secrets, and to lie to protect them.
Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: None
Categories: Parental Snape > Biological Father Snape
Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: None
Categories: Parental Snape > Biological Father Snape
Rated: T
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys
Chapters: 12 - Completed: No - Updated: 05 Nov 2005 / 03 Feb 2005
Series: None - Challenges: None
Chapters: 12 - Completed: No - Updated: 05 Nov 2005 / 03 Feb 2005
Series: None - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 12: Breakdown | 27 Aug 2007 |
| Reviewer: SnowySleigh (Signed) |
- I spent the better part of the afternoon reading this fic; which is utterly amazing, you've done a great job on it. The best part about coming into a fic part-way through is, of course, that I have all these wonderful chapters to read. The only thing bad about it is that I'm eager for more....ASAP.
I'm angry at the adults on Harry's behalf for all the decisions and actions they've taken on his behalf without consulting him, but I like that you've explained their actions in a logical way. Dumbledore was wrong to do some of what he did, but was not irrational. I understand Harry's reluctance to trust, so I smiled when, despite this, he showed that he still cared for Dumbledore by his reluctance to stun him, even though he may not trust the man.
One thing that really has me curious is your portrayal of Snape. In the beginning of your fic, he didn't seem to be such a bad guy. When Harry was making potions in that lab in the early mornings, and Snape discovered him, the man was civil. He complimented Harry's potion as Harry was leaving (although he promised he'd of taken more points of Harry then would be given for the potion). But when Snape cast Legillmens on Harry, he seemed to do it out of cruel intentions. The two events seem to conflict each other....so I'm curious. Is Snape going to be a good guy or a bad guy in this fic? I'm hoping he'll be good; and gain a new understanding of Harry when he goes to stay at the Dursleys.
This fic is all-around amazing though, I must say. I like that Harry's super!power isn't instantly perfect; he has to practice with it and get used to it, it has both positive and negative effects on him.
Another chapter will make my day, whatever day it may come on.
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After Snape's visit to Surrey, Harry writes a thank-you letter that triggers an extended correspondence and a tentative friendship between the two of them.
Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: None
Categories: Healer Snape, Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape, Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Rated: T
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Age Difference Romance, Profanity, Romance/Het
Chapters: 17 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 02 Sep 2009 / 25 Aug 2007
Series: Chivalry - Challenges: None
Chapters: 17 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 02 Sep 2009 / 25 Aug 2007
Series: Chivalry - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 4: In Care Of, Part One | 29 Aug 2007 |
| Reviewer: SnowySleigh (Signed) |
- It's the small touches that are the reason I love this story. Snape's fighting to keep control in front of the Slytherins and Gryffindors, while scared out of his mind for Harry. His distaste and annoyance for Harry's heroics, his grudging admiration of Hermione's work (and how she tried to fix Harry's potion after he sabotaged it).
My two favourite lines in this chapter are: "he feels the thrum of Harry's heartbeat against his fingers, faint and thready but palpable, and if Granger weren't standing there with his wand at last he would probably betray himself before all and sundry by sobbing his relief into the boy's hair." and "you will cease flaunting your offensive assumption that I would prefer my own convenience to your dire need, and let me do my job—which, at the moment, is to preserve what I can of your health and sanity." They're so perfectly in character for Snape, while still conveying his concern for Harry.
Hard to choose between the two Snapes...but snarky!Snape is my favourite, so I'll have to choose him.
Author's Response: Madam: Thank you for your flattering assessment that I was "out of my mind with fear". I cannot tell you how this warms me. I am almost as pleased by this as the fact that you apparently seem to admire me most when I am overcome by annoyance with Gryffindor antics. Perhaps you were a Gryffindor yourself? It would seem likely. S. Snape
| Title: Chapter 5: In Care Of, Part Two | 01 Sep 2007 |
| Reviewer: SnowySleigh (Signed) |
- Sorry to hear Snape got writer's cramp and refuses to reply now; I greatly enjoyed my review response from him. Maybe Harry will have more luck...it could help him keep his mind off this nasty dreams he's experiencing.
Alright; my favourite part of this chapter is a toss-up, I think, between Snape reading Vernon's letter (and telling Dumbledore to deal with Vernon Dursley before he is able to), and Snape comforting Harry when he's crying out for Lily.
Snape was beautifully in-character this chapter, and I enjoyed his thoughts and emotions. How he thought Harry was dull, arrogant, and rebuffing him in the first potions class, and the discovery that he hadn't. I'm glad Snape finally discovered Harry's scar from the blood quill; I'd love to see him ask Harry who did it and track down Umbridge afterwards.
I'm interested to see how Luna will interact with Harry in this state; and for Harry's sake, I hope she can help.
Author's Response: Hi, SnowySleigh! I just passed your comments along to Professor Snape. He wants you to know that he will "bash that bloody keyboard over that horrible harridan's head" before he'll answer any more reviews. But I secretly think he was a little flattered because his scowl went away for a whole second. Love, Harry
| Title: Chapter 7: For Your Immediate Attention | 06 Sep 2007 |
| Reviewer: SnowySleigh (Signed) |
- I'm...out of words to describe how amazing this chapter was. No matter how beautifully long each chapter is, you leave me dying for more.
If I start rambling about the last half of the chapter, I may never stop, so I'll start at the beginning for simplicity's sake. I love that Snape is fond of Luna; protecting her as well, because he knows what it's like to be bullied as a child. You keep Snape in character so well as he gradually comes to care about Harry and Luna, that this might as well be canon. I squealed more at this than canon, I think.
But the last half? I think that just made this my favourite Harry Potter fic, out of the many out there. Harry's wondering about whether or not Vernon being there was a dream, him spilling the potion than being too afraid to ask Snape; those things were all nice and in character (as if anything in this fic has *ever* actually been OOC), but the confrontation between Vernon and Harry, later interrupted by Snape; was amazing. Snape's rage was depicted beautifully and I was with Harry- for a moment there, I thought he might have killed Vernon. I love that he appears as if he might kill Harry's Uncle only until he looks back at Harry. And the end; it was perfect in every way. Snape sitting beside Harry, his few minutes of quiet as he calms down. And of course (it goes without saying!), Snape comforting Harry as he cried.
Just....amazing. I'm rating this story the highest I can, a 10, but it's so much more in my eyes. I don't know if there *IS* a number out there that high.
Author's Response:
You make my day, you know that? :-) I am really glad you regard everyone as being in character, and that the story worked for you so well. I'm also glad you picked up on the fact that it was looking back at Harry that stopped Snape killing Vernon. The next chapter opens with the same scene from Snape's POV, so you have a bit more of it to look forward to. :-)
| Title: Chapter 8: Handle With Care | 08 Sep 2007 |
| Reviewer: SnowySleigh (Signed) |
- Alright. I've said this before; but my ability to describe something is nowhere near your astounding quality at description, so I'll be forced to say it again: your characterizations are amazing. I love that Snape is so aware of how little time has truly passed; and that he isn't about to become all cuddly and nice. He cares about Harry, we can see, but doesn't know how to show it or deal with it (I say deal, because Snape's bound to have conflicting feelings on this). I love that he's still a snarky git; and doesn't know how to reply to Harry when he says he knows better than to think Snape could ever care about Harry. That scene about broke my heart, by the way.
Harry feels so utterly broken this chapter as well; and I was glad Snape wouldn't let him shrink away from all the attention and caring Harry thinks he doesn't deserve. The slight Occlumency to find out what Harry was feeling was a nice touch as well.
I have two lines in particular I want to point out for being especially awesome this chapter as well; when Poppy says Harry will have to go back with Snape, and Snape's reply of "I never intended otherwise." The second is also Snape's line. "What I want, Potter," Snape says, leaping to his feet, only just managing to control the volume of his voice, "is to know what sort of twisted emotional alchemy has so warped your brain that you dare not lift your hand against those who would harm you!" That entire scene was perfect really, you could feel Snape's slight confusion and anger that the Dursley's have trashed Harry's self-esteem so much he doesn't even try to protect himself; even at Hogwarts, where he can *use* magic.
I held off on reading this until I'd finished my homework yesterday, as a treat to myself; and I have to say, what a treat it was. I eagerly await the next chapter.
Author's Response: Calling Snape conflicted is like calling Iraq troubled. :-) Glad I could be there at the end of a long hard slog through homework.
| Title: Chapter 9: Please Respond | 09 Sep 2007 |
| Reviewer: SnowySleigh (Signed) |
- Again, amazing. I love the description of how Snape feels the next morning; it was hilarious and understandable. "A few minutes later, most of the dancing hippogriffs and at least one of the trolls hammering against the inside of his skull go quietly back to their usual business and leave him in peace." That line in particular made me laugh.
My other favourite line this chapter is from Harry's thoughts: "Harry knows, believes, deep in his heart, that even if Vernon Dursley were to charge through the door of the parlor at this very moment, Snape would drop him before he had the chance to so much as shout at him." YES! I squealed happily at that; I love that Harry feels safer in Snape's presence and trusts that Snape will protect him.
And Snape smiling at the end of the chapter was perfect as well. He *so* cares about Harry.
Author's Response: Literary hangovers are NEVER NOT FUNNY. And yes, maybe one day Snape will even work up to smiling AT Harry, and not just at the back of his head.
| Title: Chapter 11: Upon Receipt | 20 Sep 2007 |
| Reviewer: SnowySleigh (Signed) |
- Nothing makes you want to update faster than a steady stream of messages? Then reviewing is an absolute MUST.
I must have somehow missed the last chapter; how, I don't quite know....but it means I have twice the magic today, so I'm not complaining.
Everything about these last two chapters was beautifully done.....I was reminded of how good your characterization of everyone is compared to other fics I've read once AGAIN when I read Dumbledore's dressing-down of Snape. I thought it was a bit anti-climactic considering all the attention it's been given over the previous chapters, but when I think about it and consider Hermione's comment; it really makes sense. It's EXACTLY the sort of thing Dumbledore would say to rebuke Snape; and I appreciated the line about Wizards such as Dumbledore rarely needing to yell to achieve the same effect.
The attack on Luna brought out Snape's caring side *again*; and I loved the sheer depth of his reactions. How he dealt with the offending Slytherins was tastefully done, true to Snape's character as always. This line in particular, "You have attempted to commit the crimes of a man. You will face me as one." was one that sent chills up my spine. It was something that Snape would say; and conveyed his utter anger and outrage without needing to resort to yelling. I could almost hear the dangerous undertones in his voice.
The last scene between Harry and Snape made me smile again though; it was beautiful, and I love that Snape shows the most concern and caring for Harry when Harry's just fallen asleep. I love how true you can stay true to their characters and STILL get them to care about each other. And there's no doubt in my mind Snape cares about Harry....his 'agonizing, gut-clenching terror' shows that.
Author's Response:
There's a reason I had that little exchange between Hermione and Ron in there. I thought it was slightly anticlimactic too, but I knew it had to be like that, so I appropriated my characters for an explanation.
I'm glad you liked that line, it was one of my favorites. :)
| Title: Chapter 11: Upon Receipt | 12 Jan 2008 |
| Reviewer: SnowySleigh (Signed) |
- I'm not sure if I've already reviewed this chapter or not-- but I just wanted to let you know I haven't forgotten this fic! I know all about real life getting in the way, and writer's block...all of those things which aren't conducive to writing (or good writing...though it feels like the same thing a lot of the time).
I look forward to the next update, whenever that may be.